All Comments on 'Hush Money'

This is an excellent and compact story. The author caught my attention with the line, "He moves a finger, indicating I should turn around. Slowly." and her "voice" throughout was both genuine, and genuinely exciting. The author did an excellent and authentic job on a short, simple but compelling story. The ending ties into the title very nicely... enjoy....

Well the material isn't too my taste... I'm about as far from sub as someone can get without actually being dom. However, it was quite well written and I liked the pacing. The only suggestion I have is to perhaps have one or two other people read through your stories before you post. Nothing glaring.. just a few minor tweaks. All in all.. a most admirable first story:)