by DiaperedSiouxsie
What a fine young gentleman. I'm sure his 21" will come in handy some day. Maybe he could use that rod better in a game of limbo?
you were on to something with the beginning of this story and the middle, though full of cliche's, was entertaining. Then you go and end it like that? What in the hell were you thinking? If you were getting bored you should have left it and come back, the ending is just a crying shame. Please try again, you can make it work but this is a crime against literature.
The holes in all the guys foreheads is where I lost it and started laughing so hard that my two cats are still hiding under the bed, huddled in terror... I laughed all the way to the end and for a few minutes after... Good show! I never actually laugh that hard...