by DG Hear
Psychological studies show that more in love a person is with their spouse, the easier it is for them to move on. well written story about love, loss, and recovery.
He obviously loved his wife soooo much, he was able to get over her death, the death of his son and the death of his unborn child in six months. What a complete asshole.
i really liked this story but like all the authers on here you all seam like you cant wait to get it finest much more could have been said on jerry and connie plethera of stuff on married more kids ect.. but i guess in our minds we can come to our own conclution
Good but sad story. Also sad because he lost trust in her. Only regained by the letter. He is a doubting Thomas.
The main character need only to know that his wife and child were in serious trauma and fighting for life or already dead. He should only know how to cope up the pain. Just because a man was in the accidented car does not give any reason to know any thing more. She had a car, which has a passenger seat and she goes out and does not sit in burqua at home. and worst part, he did not consider even about his child who was his mother while giving his suspicion.
If he heaad gossips in funerals about his wife, it was all the more necessary to protect the honour of his dead wife as a loving husband. But he came out as a wimp not owning up his wife against any Tom Dick and Harry. If he were a real man (leave aside good man) , he must have given a funeral speech some thing like this :
"Today I am mourning my loving wife and only child who have been taken away by cruel and tragic death. My wife had been nothing except a loving and faithful wife since said "I do" of couse except a great mother for last 4 years. I wnat to tell some rumour mongers and gossipers that I dont have an iota of proof about their 2 peeny thpoughts. How was the gentelman travelling in the same accidented car related to my loving wife is not known to me. If any one knows, he or she can tell me. he can be a business contact or an old friend. I dont know him and so cant tell about him but I know my wife far better than that and have full faith in her. So unless some one has any conclusive evidence otherwise, I will not allow any one to disrespect the great soul adding pain to already grieving family."
Ofcourse then he would not have faced "no one contacted me from my family or my wifes family"
And no. His wife did not owe writing a letter giving all answers to the questions that would arise after her tragic death to give him a "closure". How can she do that? Did she have premonition of her death?.
His wife and child were pure soul and God took them away from him because he just did not deserve them.
Loved it. Had a great pace….had enough detail to enrich the telling….and had a happy ending.
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One head scratcher: the mention that nobody from Lydia’s family had any contact with Jerry after the funeral. Why?
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5 *****
Damn that was a little dark i didn't like the idea of the death of the kid that was a deal breaker in my opinion however it was a good story for the most part besides the death of both the wife and son but surprisingly it was about 2 loving wives and that is definitely not normal for this category i have to give it a lower rate cause the death of the son
A LW story with...(wait for it...)....nothing but Loving Wives!!
Only one stupid cheater and he is dead.
Sorry for the losses suffered by the MC, but in the end he can celebrate a real Loving Wife. Well, actually TWO Loving Wives if the story plays out as promised.
Sorry to see DGH is no longer an active contributor. Many thanks to him for his many past shared stories.
Sad to see the death of a true loving wife and their unborn child. Well done. Quite emotional. 5 stars.
Feel so sad for Lydia and her young son and their unbirn child, and of course the MC left behind. He had a new family now, but it will never be the same.
Feel sorry that Lydia was suspected for so many months. She was a true loving wife. At least the MC got closure. Sad she felt compelled to use Mikey as protection since Derek was hitting on her. Got him killed. Sad but good story.
Love a happy ending, but Im left with one giant question. Why did she say Derek's name when she died if there wasnt an affair? I gey feeling guilty for killing a passenger while driving, but sure begging forgiveness from your son would rate higher than a random client/stranger? Still a good read, but it does make me wonder as her dying words seem so out of place with the loving wife yhe letter makes her out to be.
He would have / should have been given an opportunity to go thru his wife's wrecked car to retrieve any personal effects before it went to the crusher. Would have found paperwork for the real estate listing/showing. Better discovery method than a forgotten letter left at her doctor's office. Still a 5* because of the original plot and DGH's excellent writing skills.
Read it again. Boy can you flesh out some characters. The lack of notification of a fetus and the note in the doctor's office are kind of glaring misses in this tale. Still stand by the 5 I originally gave it. Oh, and to the annony of 1/16/17, I did read the story, that's how I knew about the things I mentioned. I did not pull them out of thin air. (How do you write like you are talking really slow?)
I earlier today panned a story by this author and gave it 1*. But this i gave 5*, i am a sucker for a happy ending and so this was meant for me. I could find faults, there are a few, the favourite one in LW category, there is always another beautiful woman on stand by for the distraught husband, is that a pre requisite of any LW story on literotica. He hadn't even buried his son and wife and he was espying another women. I have been lenient, giving the author a bit of free license to write has he sees fit.
What a sad story for Jerry, he not only loses his wife and son but unknowing to him an unborn child. It was almost a little unnerving that there was a thought by Jerry asking was there an affair? But in the end the letter cleared up any notion of an affair between Lydia and Derek, there was none. The ironic meeting of Jerry and Connie kind of made the sad story a happy one at the end when Connie and Jerry ended up together and the letter that Lydia wrote to Jerry removed the cloud over what really happened and that was good as we now know that Lydia was a faithful spouse, and her memory was not that of a cheating spouse. Well done 5/5
Wow. The husband losea his wife and son a s ll he can think about is if she had an affair. I understand that would be important to understand but is it priority #1? What about mourning and grief. Screw what the neighbors think. But even worse, the MC really moves fast for a widower into a new woman's arms. Really?
Not a bad story, but I can't tell you how much I've come to despise the trope of the ready-made drop-in wife so many LW authors employ. I'm surprised so few others don't find more problems with it when the cheated-on husband ends up with the ex-wife of the cheater.
Very nicely done and not a cheating wife in sight. How refreshing on literotica.
Great ending to a great story; on e well told. Having once been a widower I find Jerry shifting allegiances too quickly. But then each author is allowed some measure of suspension of disbelief. 5*
As Dustin Hoffman said often whilst playing Captain Hook, "Well played sir, well played". 5*!!
THANK YOU!
Paul
All quite interesting, but a little rushed for me. The plotting was good but somewhat underdeveloped, and the characters were short of being fully developed. For all that, I enjoyed the read enough for 4 Stars.
Very sad story and the search for answers is quite normal and understandable; you need closure. If you have lost a child, you'll understand better why this search is important. It is also absolutely essential to remember that you are ENTITLED TO YOUR OWN LIFE. What do you think the decreased would have wanted you to do?
5*
BJ
Yeah, not very exciting, I didn't care for it, I'd watch the news if I wanted this kind of ... boring entertainment
To "Anonymous" from 14 days ago: This was a very good story. Not perfect but very good. And this author is one of the better ones on this website. Have you ever written a story? Since you hide behind the coward's Anonymous cover, I doubt it. You should try it. Put your name on it. Then we will all know who is a "total asshole" and a "moron". It isn't this author. -4-
The author is a total asshole. Connie will you have dinner with me, I am so happy. The little boy I just buried was actually my son, isn't that wonderful news. "I am so happy for you Jerry", said Connie. Give me a fucking break what a ridiculous statement. They were actually celebrating that the dead boy was his biological son. The author is a moron. 1.
See, THAT'S how a twist is done! If the narrator knows the twist, then it's not a twist, it's a cheat.
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A couple of minor points: Why didn't the insurance pay HIM $100k each for Lydia and Mikey's deaths?
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How did Connie recognize him at the funeral? They hadn't met yet.
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Why would getting a sitter meaning telling someone else before him? Surely she's had appointments before that she had to get a sitter.
Beautiful, bittersweet story.
In answer to Detroit Dave,
It had been several days if not weeks before the MC found out about the fetus. As horrible as this sounds it was not considered a human being to be buried although some hospitals do that. It is considered human waste like having a limb removed. It is handled that way. Handled with respect definitely! But differently than an actual death.
The letter was both a relief and a new cause for great sadness. I was struck by how differently the MC likely would have remembered his wife and their marriage if his questions had gone unanswered. For him mistakenly to remember her as adultress and their marriage as sullied would perhaps have been an even greater tragedy than her death. The author's portrayal of the gossip circulating among the mourners was very well done. The power of such salacious chatter to defame the defenseless is profound.
Great story. My only quibble with the story concerns the fetus that was removed in the RE. Why didn't he get a DNA test done, that is rather routine now.
detroitdave
They did move on pretty darned fast, though.
Got me a little misty at the end. I love a real Loving Wife story like this.
Great story! Definitely not a paint by numbers. The snarky side of me just has one comment. Her hospital bill was $5,000 for two days of intensive care? Should have taken her to a better hospital. You barely get a bed and a couple of aspirin for $,2500 per day.
Very well conceived and written. The letter was heart breaking, a fresh source for sorrow. At least he had a shoulder to cry on! 5*s.
You're such a great writer, so why don't you show us how good you are? Didn't think so, shithead. DG good job. Like I told another writer as the man sang "...ya can't please everyone so ya gotta please yourself..." Signed: BTW
Speak for yourself. I'm here for the free Tyson chicken nuggets. It's the rubber and woodchips that bring out the flavor.
Don't listen or take to heart these hateful anonymous people. They are only on this site to be spiteful and hateful. Great writing job. The only thing I did not agree with was the timeline the man started to have feelings for the other woman. Saw no real mourning period. But hey it is a story. Great job.
These are stories, fiction. non-real, you want real go to the library, you know big building lots of books.
Pure garbage,wife's don't leave their husbands notes that they are pregnant,they tell them face to face.
there are some people in this world hat wont cheat even if you hold a gun to here head im just sayan
Rubbish,why would she write him a letter,she would tell him that night when he got home from his shift.It is just a lazy way to end the story.As I say RUBBISH!
I DID read the story. I have many of the same questions as pappy7 plus another. Why ,if the fetus had been removed (although I agree it wouldn't just have been removed when Lydia was brought into the ER.), wasn't Jerry informed about the loss of his unborn child? Why was she going as fast as she was that she lost control of the car?
All of a sudden Connie calls Jerry to come over and make love? No led up to it? It just happens? No way! Where's the led up to it? The romance? Come on. Get with it.
too many abnormalities. She was meeting a client after hours and had met the same one before, after hours, yet her husband didn't know about either time and on the second time she took their son along when if she had told her husband about it he could have made or helped make plans to have someone watch his son. She didn't tell her husband she thought she was pregnant but did leave him a letter at the doctor's office. Really? And no one thought this was strange? And she was apologizing to Derek with her last breath and not her husband? Damned skippy there would have been a DNA test on the fetus. Not saying she did, not saying she didn't but what kind of wife and mother calls the "client's" name and not her son's who was also in the car? Come to think of it, I didn't like the story much at all.
I have had you pegged as a great writer since I became a member of Lit six years ago. You can check out my favorite author list -- you name is at the very top. I have hoped that by studying the writing style of the better authors, I can improve my own performance. So I often compare an author's recent works with his earlier efforts. There are some whose early stories were trash, but whose more recent works are quite good. You, on the other hand, have me bewildered. Were you a child prodigy, born to write?
You wrote this story ten years ago, only a year after you joined Lit. Its structure is so very near perfect that it tells me that you didn't need to pound out 347 stories to polish your craft. You were good from the start!
Your talent humbles me. Oh, I can spell and punctuate and paragraph and iron the lumps and wrinkles out of sentences. But you, sir, are a real story teller! So I must say, as I have so often, thank you for sharing this gem of a story with us.
Hans
...to turn a plot, that had the smell of adultery for everyone to see, around and into something absolutely plausible and lovable. So she hadn´t cheatet after all. An ending of my taste. Thanks for writing it. 5*
if you do,it has to be completely and unselfish TK U MLJ LV NV
You included that letter. It would have been shitty if you had left all that circumstantial evidence unanswered. Good story. Sad, but good.
Or, if I have read it I have forgotten. I'm an old man. Thank you for writing, as always.
This is basically a sad tale with something of a happy ending.
Language does evolve that much is true, but traditions are still done in the same way they have always been done, that is what makes them traditions.
In general American usage the term 'wake' has pretty well lost it's original meaning due to modern medical technology.
Now people will use it to mean a gathering of friends and family before and after a funeral. It's just the way our popular language continues to evolve.
As for the issue of the Insurance payout. If I understand the author's intentions, the payout from Lydia's auto insurance was a liability rider, paid to prevent lawsuits on behalf of Derek's estate.
I know a lot of people make the mistake of cutting Liabilty from their Home & Auto insurance in a short-sighted attempt to reduce their payments for insurance.
"You hate to pay for insurance. You will hate if misfortunate necessity should force you to collect from that insurance.
However, when that bitter day arrives, you will be relieved that you had made the sacrifices necessary to make the payments on that insurance plan."
The tradition of wakes came about because people would lapse into deep unconsciousness and be mistaken for dead and be buried.
The wake was to give a chance for them to wake up before being buried instead of after.
That is why they are always before the funeral.
I thought this was a beautifully written story, but I don't understand why Connie had any claim to the 300k personal injury clause on Lydia's insurance.
Maybe things are different in your culture or area, but in my experience wakes are held BEFORE the funeral.
People will usually gather after the burial, but those aren't technically wakes.
Very satisfying ending, just enough hints of a possible affair without it being an obvious red herring that would have made the ending seem phony.
I do enjoy life affirming tales, that celebrate commitment to life and family support.
This one threw in some questions and mystery to add to the plot and generate interest. Enjoyed it. Thanks, DG Hear! Dan
She did not write it at the office she had it there -
She wrote it to leave at the house to explain where she was and why she was doing something odd (taking her child with her). It gave him the good news she was so excited about as well, not that strange folks -
It was a good vehicle to use to end this story which needed an ending with finality - it could well have been in her purse but then the story would gone for about 4 paragraphs right? So the author had her forget it with her checkbook at the doctor;s office -
It works let it alone -
Enjoy the story for what is important.
Hope, It seems to me that DG included the letter as a way to clear up the suspicions about a possible affair. And allow the strong, emotional ending for this poignant story. That is this is a fictional story and from my own writing experience I can tell you two things.
First, some stories, situations, characters will push a storyline in completely unexpected directions. Sometimes this current just carries me along, willy-nilly.
Second, the most difficult part of writing a story is to create a strong ending. Even major, paid authors, with all those degrees and awards and best-sellers fail. I am of the self-serving, egotistical belief that my best writing is when I start with a clever title and a strong ending. All the rest of my job is too fill the inbetween from start to finish.
The whole idea of the letter seems highly absurd. Why would she be writting him a letter, its not as if she knew she was going to die so that she had to write a letter because she would not be able to talk ti him personally, later on. Its also very unbelievable that the later just contained explainations to all the doubts you raised inthe protagonist's mind. Atmost, people write down small memos or sticky notes, not all-explaining-tying-the-loose-ends sort of letters. It also doesn't explain the wife's dying words.
So, good narration but paper thin plot
Very Moody and dramatic story frothed with intrigue and suspicion. The ending was warm and fuzzy for the poor lonely forlorn couple and kids. The writer knows how to play the heart strings and he did the job masterfully in this sad tale. Unfortunately the pussyhound created a situation in which he lost his son due to his wife's insecurities about being alone with the bastard. Derek was a very despicable character that created a great deal of angst in a very brief accounting in this story due to the author's powerful placement. Thank you DG Hear!
DG was right the first time...this is Non-Erotic...maybe Romance. Neither Sweetie was the LEAST bit adventuresome. Even Derek's conquests seem to be unmarried, and we never meet them. Not LW!
There is too much deliberate author-manipulation towards making this look suspicious. No one in Sweetie's office is told she is showing Derek cottage-type properties nor is Hubby told...but she usually did tell people who she was showing what!
The letter is totally bogus...the fact she wrote one, then the detail included...even client's hitting on her earlier. This would make a GOOD Romance novel. The embryo removal is HIGHLY unlikely. Most injuries which would damage an embryo would kill Mommy outright. Medical over-billing or opportunity for greater pathos?
It was great to see a story of suspicion that was baseless. That it was written in this category always leads the reader to believe the worst. It was nice to see the deft redirect and turn into a truly Loving Wives tale.
Very different and very entertaining. Thanks for sharing.
I enjoyed this story, which held my attention from start to nearly finish. From reading the letter onwards I did something I've not done for over 30 years since my parents died, I wept,. No! I sobbed. I was torn apart. You released emotions that I had forgotten about.
It's nice to know that are some caring loving people who have no interest in anyone other than their spouse. It warms the cockles of my heart.
And only one cheater in the bunch - the asshole -
Very nice job and a nice and very different perspective thank you so much for the change up -
a litle strange for all that to be in a letter with a "we are pregnant" notice, but it makes a clean ending with a faithful wife still being faithful.
This was a truly sad but powerful story about a man and a woman seeking closure regarding the deaths of their loved ones. Road accidents like that do happen too often... a single moment of letting slip your attention (perhaps distracted by her son?) and before you know it you're in a crash. Glad to see that the deceased were not cheating with each other – although Derek was a multiple cheater, just not with Lydia...
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An excellent job of keeping us in the dark until the last. I must admit I was expecting the worst ... how nice it turned out to be the best!!
I had EVERYTHING wrong -- Mikey's sperm donor, the fetus, Lydia's cheating. Everything! Made the story all that much more sadder for me but it was a 'good' kind of sad. Jerry was a good man.
faithfull to the end, a wife that loved her husband above all. He had nothing to worry about. She never cheated and even though he lost his wife and son, he could truly move on. DG a great job
this is the first comment i've left in nearly 3 years of reading stories on literotica. your narrative left me weeping in tears, and very few authors here are skilled enough storytellers to have such a profound emotional impact on me.
thank you for such a touching, well written, and ultimately heart-warming tale. EB White once said that "writing in the first person is like painting with watercolors... only children and geniuses can do it well."
you, sir, are a genius.
myrrdin emrys
Anytime I read anything of yours, I am never disappointed. I thought this was just an excellent story. This one really did have a good ending and I didn't see anything hurried about it. Thank you again for all that you do for this site and for all of us who truly appreciate your work.
Instead of Derek making a pass at Lydia, the story goes. Derek was trying to buy a cabin to help reunite his and Connie's marriage. This may of showed a little bit of love in Connie's marriage also. Take it from there. Maybe to me the ending would of been just a little better. I did like the story very much. Thank you for writing it for all of us!
...have brought tears to my eyes; this is one of them. I read this story last year, but rereading was almost as reading it for the first time. Your writing style, and the plot herein, made for a very intriguing story. Thanks for the priviledge of perusing it. Jim
wow!!!wow !!!!!wow!!!!!
what a story truely a loving wife story.Hat's off to you.
Yes Stories... Have to admit that it was very well structured and interesting. You really are a fine writer!