All Comments on 'I Work Out'

Silly premise, lousy execution. Please do NOT continue, if this is the best you can do.

I've never read a story, however short, that didn't have a comma in it. Not one. This is more like short bursts of 6 to 10 words randomly separated by periods. If English is not your natural language I suggest you try writing in your native tongue.

Not trying to be cruel (and believe me when I tell you the worst is yet to come as far as comments go) but this is not good, and I suggest you retract the story and try again. Next time, read the story out loud to yourself before submitting. Good luck.

This had no point, no plot, no conclusion, and most of all no climax. You teased us to think we were going to read a sex story and we read about a silly game of truth or dare that ended up not going anywhere.

Therefore, I rated it 1*.