All Comments on 'I'll Show You Mine If... Ch. 03'

The pace with which your story is progressing is great, though I'm sure there are others that may not agree,since some like a fast paced story. Looking forward to the next and future installments. Keep up the great work!

I hope that the concept of the whole story isn't to just end on Robb and Kris getting together for a good fuck. There's a lot more to tell after that. The true long lasting love that they could share, moving out of mom and dad's place into a place of their own. Kris becoming pregnant, and the couple telling everyone that they are going to be married. The story is really good and has a lot of life to be told yet. Thanks......Rich

If I'm the brother reading that letter, I'm thinking of telling the sister about our third option: We cut the bullshit. We don't need the others there, just to keep us "safe" from each other. We're going to do what we want to do, period. I don't want them, I want you, and you feel the same way about me. If you want to include them, fine, we'll all have at it, but we both know where this is going so let's shitcan the idea of using your friends as human shields. It's time to lose the artificial constraints.<p>

If you insist on having them there with us, great. Let them watch us make love, because that's what we're going to do, whether they're there or not.<p>

Know that, sis.<p>

Great story so far.

I agree...most people do like a fast paced story. However, I think this one is awesome and I can't wait to read more, hurry please, it's addicting! I also hope that this is not just leading up to their first time and that will be the end of the story...there seems like there is so much more to this relationship... anyways great story, definitely keep writing!! :-D

That was a great third chapter that you wrote. I can hardly wait for the next chapter to see what you do with Robbie and the girls. It would be nice to see the relationship between Robbie and his stepsister Kris develop a little bit more into something. Also to see Robbie and Michelle finally get together.

Oh my god im loveing this story so far. Cant wait for the next chapter and hopefully for more beyond that.

Very awesome third chapter and I'm looking forward to seeing where this really will lead as I don't feel she has that much control to not take this further.

I find myself agreeing with Rich in SW Ohio. I'm hoping you develop this into a full blown sibling romance and a life-long love affair. We will see, won't we?

you got way to unrealistic with this chapter you are trying to rush things what happened in this chapter should have been spread out over several months not days please keep it realistic and believable if you fucked this early i don't think it's worth reading the rest typical of a male writer

way to unrealistic no guy as shy and unsure of himself would ever have gone to the party to begin with and the part where he goes to his sisters room after the party no way he would have avoided her at all costs keep it atleast sounding realistic and stop trying to change human nature

Why not simply tell her the truth, that he went there to see if he could find her, and that he only went with Michelle since she came with Luke. If she really is interested in Rob she shouldn't have been with Luke... Me personally think Rob and Kris belong together, and I hope there wont be any angst in the rest of the chapters. :)

I thought you were leading up to a more romantically-inclined response from Rob. Oh well, I'm sure that will come to fruition in your later chapters. Can't wait.

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I hate Ultimatums, especially when the party receiving it, hasn't had a chance to talk about with the other party first. It seem so unfair. They are obviously falling for each other and this can only hurt them. Jealousy is a dangerous thing in cases like this. I know whatever happens is already written, but if I was to write a situation like this, I would have Rob either leave a note for her to come see me ASAP, call her or something and actually talk about everything together first, and If she was not willing to do that then Rob should ignore her and her party request. I know that's not sexy and could, if done incorrectly ruin the story but if feels real to me.

OOOHHH...the ANGST that is broadcast on page 2 here...Kris has deeper feelings for Rob, which have now come to the surface even more, through the tone of the letter.

Kris is 'trying' to control herself, she knows where this is going to go/where she WANTS it to go, and I understand that she has these reservations. She is right about the potential injury to their relationship...there is TOO MUCH AT RISK to not be careful. I applaud her efforts, and I respect her quite a bit for them!

I see this becoming VERY HOT in the next chapters...more than it is already...is it gonna be a 'harem' outcome, with Kris and her friends all sharing?? We shall see!!

Five**5**Stars...deserves many more, it is so good!!🌋🌋🌋🌋🌋⚡⚡⚡⚡⚡🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟💫💫💫💫💫