All Comments on 'In The Mind's Eye'

This is such a subtly erotic story. I love the possibilities of the ending. I look forward to hearing about the continuation.

The story idea is great although I found the writing hard to read and the formatting difficult as well. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.

You show much promise as a writer... with some help from a good editor to improve the structure there'll be good things from you in the future. Good first effort.