All Comments on 'Incest Love Affair Ch. 02'

Good story perhaps if there was enough of it, but dribbling it out greatly distracts.

Parts I & II were short sweet and teasingly to the point. The prior Anonymous has is WRONG.

A part III is in order.

Dear Elizabeth,

Super story! It's very obvious that you are passionate about what happened and how hot it made you feel! Did you get hot again writing? Love to see a part three!

...chapter three please!

I hate it when authors do their stories in tiny pieces and string it out to 20 parts, Please take your time and give it to us in one fell swoop.

You basically repeat yourself throughout the story. Ex. He fucked me hard. Switch positions. Fucked me harder. Snuck upstairs. Fucked me there. Hard.

BORING

if u spent more time on the details it would help build up excitement and make it more pleasurable to the reader. By getting to the point so fast, the reader doesn't have any reason to do more than skim the whole story. If this is one of your first stories it's a start. But elaborate more and your readers will be happier.