All Comments on 'Introduction to a Whore'

I realize this is your first try at writing a story, and there are a few things you will pick up as you go along ... but use a site author until you get a grip on things. The sentence structure and spelling distract from the story.

You have the elements of a good story here, but it needs a lot of work. You need to read your story out loud to yourself before you submit it, so you know whether it is gramatically correct. You would do well to submit the story to an editor. Keep working on it, though.

What a fool her boyfriend is. And he is going to marry this slut? I guess he will be happy paying at least half of the bills and sitting around every night waiting for her to get home from fucking other guys, hoping she has enough energy for at least a blowjob. That is until she finds another Scott who wants her long term. Then she will be gone in a heartbeat. Guys, don't try this at home. You won't like the result.

Love it.