by betweenthesheets
i am wondering why you put plot devices in that you dont use?you made a big deal of finding her mom then the dna thing which didnt get shown. then you made a big deal of the phone call from wilson about a package that was delivered to the apt. that was never mentioned again,why?if they were important to bring up then you should finish with them
Great story has turned into a novel keep it up. You keep me interested the whole time
was the package that Wilson said was there, when he called Owen. Sometimes authors make us go back in our mind to use knowledge they give us.
But this last chapter reminded me of Jim Palmer when he did the Jockey shorts ad, that was on the billboard in times square.
Keep it up BTS.
The Eagle screams a big two talons up +5* of course.
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Keeps getting better and better with each passing chapter. Great job. Can't wait until tomorrow.
Please ignore the criticism on mentioning things only once. I love stories that provide small clues or hints at what's coming to keep my interest high. Stories that explain everything makes me feel like the author is condescending or thinks readers are ignorant. Not explaining things implies we readers have a brain cell or two. Thank you for a great story.
If it's the end of the series then ty for a wonderful story.
however, i do feel it should end as it started among friends all together having a last fun.
Hoping this story is nowhere near close to being done. I am completely hooked !!!