All Comments on 'Jack and Alison Ch. 01'

delete this and run it through a good editor then repost it. you have a lot of missing words and other errors that should have been caught in proofreading if it had been done, and would have been caught by a good editor. SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND A WHOLE LOT OF RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR BEFORE POSTING AND FINISH WHAT YOU START.

Delete this & do NOT attempt to recycle this garbage!

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I wouldn't jump to garbage. You had the idea of what you wanted to get across in the story. But I feel it was rushed way too much. And because of the rush you left out alot of description. It's not trash, and I think with alittle more time spent on it as a whole it could be a Much better read. Keep yer chin up, and wow'em with the next one!

I'm sorry everyone. I read this again and completely agree. I need to pay more attention and probably need a proof reader. I will try to do better the next time. Thanks for the feedback.