All Comments on 'Jackie's Wal-Mart Experence'

All the misspellings makes it hard to read.

...before correcting that deficiency.

Wal-Mart's John Haefner, who is now in Personnel in Wal-Mart's headquarters in Arkansas, used to be Store Manager in Wal-Mart's Moses Lake, WA store. Claiming to be an outstanding Christian, he used to take both married and single women back into his Manager's office and shut the door. They often left 30-60 minutes later, walking bowlegged with cum seeping down their inner thighs if they had a dress on, or their pants showing a certain wetness, also on their inner thighs. A few of them gave birth 9 months later but no one seemed to know who the father(s) were. And the women involved often were promoted afterwards to Assistant Store Manager.

Somebody else that knew Haefner! He was one horny dude, but my sister is still the asst. manager at her Walmart, even though he's gone and her kid is grown.

The spelling and grammar spoil what could have been a very good story.

The plot is ridiculous, the only job she could get was a Wal-Mart? I didn't realize that Wal-Mart paid so well that you wouldn't call the police, followed by a lawyer to SUE their asses. Gosh, I find it hard to believe that in the U.S. where you can successfully sue for burning yourself on coffee from McDonald's, you wouldn't sue one of the largest companies in the world for sexual harressment.

This was horrid and by your profile you match another old submissive on here posting stories.

It was written quite racist in being black. Whether deliberate or written doped up, it was still bad.

He fell from a latter. Now what kind of ladder is that? Maybe it was a ladder that was later so it became a latter? Spell check does not work if you misspell a word and it spells the same as another word. Grammar checks are almost worthless. An editor is your only hope if you want to keep writing, or, of course, you could go back and finish high school.

Your bio stated proclivity has weakened your mind set and caused disdain.<P>

Get into the proper venue where you might be appreciated or tolerated.

poorley written, stupid, not erotic,just bad.

not a man or a husband, but a whimp and a self made chuckhold. Is that what you were trying to relay in this so called story? If it was, you could have saved the time in writing it.

Keep writing. Love that cuckold stuff.

Your first sentence in the story had a bad mispelling. "In 1980 I was out of work because off an industrial accident".

It should be 'of'. THINK! A mispelling in THE first sentence?

Turns a reader off.

Confusing, stupid, not well written or basic spell check.

Just a plain bland fucking story. Most of the happenings were pretty predictable.