All Comments on 'Jennie's "Nightmare" Ch. 01'

This story is fresh and inventive. Great start!

Who's the blonde & where does she know her from? A schoolmate?

Something in the character development clicked for me. Perhaps taking the new path of making her a parishiner and not the minister's daughter added a subtle realisim. Whatever the link to my enjoying your writing style it works for me.

Keep up the good work.

Just lowlife stroke story. "1" !

Subtle details in relationships make them unique and you have woven a pattern of action and communication which rings true. I really enjoy writers who think about moments in their life then use them to improve a piece of fiction like this.

The two which I enjoyed most were:

"You're changing," Greg said with an odd smile.

and

"You'd better hurry up," Greg said, grinning at his wife as he finished dressing. "We're late!"

"You bastard!" Jennie snapped, surprising them both. Jennie wasn't one to curse. She blushed again while her husband just laughed.

Well done!