All Comments on 'Jennifer'

This was great please continue it. :)

This is really good please continue.

great start, and she will come back i'm sure, they usually do :))

It's a good start, I can't wait for more.

I love dogs too, but that doesn't mean I'd put 6 of them in my story. Heh.

Just raggin you. Very wonderful story. The realities of relationships. Joy. Gag.

Please please please

Your story has great potential and I love the characters! I am a little confused, if Avery is her mom's friend how does she spend more time with Alex than her own mother? Please continue, though you don't think writing is your forte, you have a good story going here!

Well written. Would love to read more.

Hope you continue, thanks so far!

Other than some small grammar and spelling errors this story is great. It does need to be continued.

Great start! You definitely need to continue the story!

I'm glad you all like my story! I am about to sit down and start writing part 2. It took me a while to get this part out so I will try my best to get it done as soon as possible. For the person that commented about Avery: she is the mother of one of Alex's former friends. Not Alex's mother's friend. Just to clear that up.

The start was rather weak and generic. Predictable. However, you began to capture my interest towards the end, (not bc of the sex). It's Jennifers back story, why she allowed that les experience to happen, then, why she was "holding out" on her boyfriend of two years. She is definitely closeted.

Please continue. :)

Well I loved it! Please continue, I would hate to think of your lovely heroines hanging in limbo. Oh, did I say I loved it?

The title says everything, lol. But seriously, continue, I want to see what happens next.

I tend to be partial to stories that build up slowly and let the characters play things out. I would definitely like to read more. Thanks for sharing your words.

u have me intrigued ..this has the potential to be a great story. i look forward to the next part 8)

More :)

PLEASE write more to this story. If not for the pleasure of your other readers then for the sake of my sanity.

please continue...love it...

Great cliffhanger!

Horrible. 1 Star

Great story. We need to have the rest.

You CLEARLY under estimate your writing skills. Good story with good character development and pacing. I'm hooked!

Please continue Story :)

Please continue this story. It would be terrible if you don't reconnect with her and at least be friends, but I think you and she both want more than just friendship. She is just frightened of her feelings and needs to have time to understand that she can love sex with both men and women.

Amazing story!! Please continue!! It's really awesome! Longer stories would be nice also but as long as you keep posting!

I'm mot certain where you plan to take this but please finish the story!

Please continue this story it is great

This story is really great so far, you really downplayed your writing ability. Please continue the story.

I have to know what happens

THIS STORY COULD GO SO MANY PLACES, SO PLEASE MORE

I really like this story. Please continue it!

More more more!!

Please continue this!!!!

Realy good storry love to read more of you good writing!!!

We want more...great story...

Good writting, dont let their relationship die, u can also put a bit of jealosy along d way

cant wait for chap 2 :P

it was great can't wait for part 2

I can't wait for part 2

Keep going and don't be afraid to elaborate more.

More please :)

I thought it was a really good story. I hope you continue it soon. Maybe you can have them adopt the kid in the end. Once again it was awesome.

Epic is putting it mildly. You gatta continue this , it's just to hot to end there

This is a very good start. I really want to know what happens next. It is well written and drew me in from the start. Please continue and finish this story, it sounds like it could be very good.

I loved it...write more please

Continue please!!!!!

more please

You can't leave us hanging write more!

Great story with loads of potential - more please!

Very sexy, keep it going!

Excellent part one, with plenty of room to build.

If I may humbly make an observation (take it or leave it at your discretion), you have a nice slow and steady buildup, and then the sex at the end seems super rushed (the way its written, not the actions). I know we all love to get to the orgasms, but the build up is important too :)

Great story! Really enjoyed the chemistry between these two and I know I'd love to see what happens, if you feel moved to share more. Thank you!

I'm sure the title conveys my message.

More!

I loved the story. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. I look forward to more. Clearly you write for women because there's actually a realistic romantic plot slowly building. Can't wait for the next installment. ChristieP

Plz

...you sure have a talent for it. Please keep it going.

I liked the story and how you built the characters up, but the ending seemed rushed compared to the rest of the story. I know some ladies will rush in for some action even when the other gal is supposedly straight, but that was not the impression I originally had of your character Alex even though she was really into Jennifer. I might have ended the story with a soul searing and sensual kiss that up ended Jennifer's world and baited the plot to carry things over to the next chapter.

Even with that being said, please continue writing because I think you did a really good job especially for a first attempt online. :)

I have really enjoyed reading this and I hope you will write more !

Please don't stop! You have an amazing way with words. The story build up was well written, and the cliff hanger..I have to know what happens to the two of them! Please write the next portion of this story!

Can't wait 2 read next instalment

Please give us more. I like your characters and I want to read about Jennifer's thoughts on what happened. Great job on your first submission.

Please continue I loved it!!!

Please continue writing. I enjoyed your story quite a lot.

Very, very cruel of you not to finish this story . . . get to work!

Loved it!! Can't wait for more....I sincerely hope you continue

I want to know more! Please continue the story! Pretty pretty pleeeeeease.

Well written. Good pacing. Good hook ending. Thanks

Great story!

This is great and It really had me going ! More please <3

Loved it!! Can't wait to read the rest!! :)

Many years ago, way more many then I care to count. A lovely young woman I was a courting. Invited me to move in with her. Every young man's dream, right? So I get all packed up and truck on over.

To find her moving out......Oy Vey indeed! An hour later she was on the road, headed back east to her parents home!

That was the very definition of 'gobsmacked!'

The only good thing about it was her landlord kindly allowed me to move into her studio apartment as I had already given up my previous residence.

For someone whose writing is not her forte, this is a good start. Over all, your writing was quite good. There were a few spelling errors/typos but not so many as to worry about. A tip about writing numbers: for numbers one to ten, use words---they look better in the text that way; for numbers 11 on use figures unless the number is the start of a sentence, in which case use words.

Looking forward to reading the next chapter.

At the beginning of the story, jennifer asks the main character how she'd feel if she got stood up by her girlfriend. Not plural, girlfriends. It led me to assume she knew the character was gay for some stereotypical reason. Just a thought.

When Jennifer says "if you call you're girlfriend..." I was speaking of the situation. As in Jennifer is asking if what her boyfriend did was okay. That wasn't her knowing that Alex is a lesbian.

What a little tease and manipulator Jennifer turned out to be, and yet this the reality most lesbians has to deal with, the curiosity of the straight females can sometimes be emotionally draining, Good script and hard to tell that this a first time story, definitely worthy of a chapter 2. Well done to the author, hope to see more soon!

i fucking loved this! write more stories :)

Wonderful story, please write more. Thank you

I love how this is an actual story and it builds up, not jumping right into the sex. Seems too many people expect to read this as pornographic smut, This is erotic literature and you've done a terrific job I hope to read more thank you for sharing.

this story is so sweet and sexy. i love that you did not jump into the sexual part one time, but took the time to develop their relationship

Please go on with the story!

The N, the O, the Oh My God I didn't Want you to Do This, the Please Stop Now, the Fuck Off, the You're Under Arrest, the We find the defendant guilty of sexual assault? Alex had absolutely no right to do what she did to Jennifer. No wonder Jennifer is crying at the end.

I absolutely love how it started and how things are moving. I cannot wait to read the next 20 chapters!

R.

More please, this story has potential & Jenny is not appreciated by blokes!

Very good part 1! thanks for sharing it.

I liked it very much. Now on to chapter two.

Excellent story. Well written. Great build