by Hurpasaurus
So, ik I kinda dissapeared for anyone who was ACTUALLY waiting for the second part. I submitte dit today hopefully will be approved.
Had some difficulties uploading the second part. Should be up in a day or two. Look out for it :)
why are people having a debate when all you have to do is use one hand to twist your nipples while the other one has to wank ur hard cock till u spew!! after all it is what we come to this site for.
Definitely continue this story. I think you should try to flesh out the action a little bit more. This could easily have been expanded into a two page story if you had given more detail. Oh...and fuck the assholes who can't offer constructive criticism.
The story was good, I liked it, but the writing needs work. Mainly, I guess it's just too unreal.
Pretty good. I love how the people saying that stories are bad are always anonymous.
Good idea, ending could use work. But like how it leaves you wanting more. Constructive Criticism is always helpful =)
Despite that stupid ass cheek of a guy who uses big words to mesmerize people into think that he has a big and useful vocabulary. It was good keep making.
I thought it was hot and hope there is a part 2. A few misspelled words is not a big deal. These stories aren't exactly written for a class. Continue on with this story please!!!
This wasn't bad, let's see what the next one is like.
Ignore guys who don't post their names on these comments: If they were paying for the story they would have a right to pick nits.