All Comments on 'Jill, Dan & Their Friend Larry Ch. 05'

Something tells me that it is Larry baby and Dan will wind up with Kim.

A great story one of heart ace, one of love and one of cheating. I have enjoyed it thus far and I think Dan deserves and should get some revenge out of this with Larry, But I think that I her own cheating way Jill dose love Dan so from that stand point I would like them to fix the marriage..... Now lets see what the writter thinks... more please

A great story one of heart ace, one of love and one of cheating. I have enjoyed it thus far and I think Dan deserves and should get some revenge out of this with Larry, But I think that I her own cheating way Jill dose love Dan so from that stand point I would like them to fix the marriage..... Now lets see what the writter thinks... more please

im glad dan has shown some balls... and ifthe kid is not his i dont blame him at all as i neitherwould not raise a kid thatwas not mine.... why not just leave jill for kim... seems like she is a better match for him anyway .... and larry i hope the bastard gets stuck with the kid ... as he is one that dont want to be tied down let him see waht it feels like to all of a sudden have responsibilities and have part of his money going for a baby and having to save for coledge and boy oh boy not being able to go out and be free

Dan i think though should be getting him some on the side .... after all he owes jill nothing except 5 years worth of fucking to pay her back for what she did to him.... maybe she could get an abortion and the divorce at same time ... getting better dan still needs more revenge though more more more

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In Part 1 it states

That was Dan never knew about his wife and best friend being together fucking their brains out until the day of their 10th anniversary.

now you have him finding out a month after the wedding

From Ch. 1: "he never knew about Jill's and Larry's sexual relations. That was Dan never knew about his wife and best friend being together fucking their brains out until the day of their 10th anniversary."

In this one he finds out when they are newlyweds.

The four of them need to reconsider and all move in together with them having babies by both men, in a continuation chapter or two.

there was know reason for kim turning on larry and spilling the beans.that part of the plot sucks. dan still the dumbass in the plot.who trust kim.

Tone It Down Guys - the author makes a good faith effort to read the comments and decides to shorten the story and you are all over him. He is trying and needs a little slack

He is getting better as a writter and decided to shorten this one as you requested which made his efforts and original plans more difficult. Sure a short introductory note could have helped us but there is some pride here too. I applaud his decision and hope you will give him some slack.

Thanks Author - for listening on many fronts - Regards

I'm really sorry, because I was trying to follow this, but I feel like I'm been in a Mixmaster. It's not bad, not bad at all. It's just confusing. The timeframes don't add up, and there are a lot of exclamation points!!!

Nice plot and very enjoyable eroticism, the mental pictures in my mind were vivid, believable and very exciting. Kim set the whole thing up, but Dan displayed the qualities of a "real man", and refused to let them cuckold him.

The structure may have needed a bit of tidying up, but the story had very high intertainment value; and could easily have more chapters.

All stories have to be tidied up before being published, so this was a very good first draft. I will be reading more from this author, who's personal values shone through.

Why are they still together? Ever hear of an annulment?

Great so far but I dont understand why their still together. Grow some balls. She been screwing him over for 5 years.

up against lust and a stiff dick. TK U MLJ LV NV

a rental car.... used by everyone and cared for by none.

They've been fucking for 5years but they talk like they it's the first time. Seriously, after 5years, they would be like any married couple. Bored.

i get it now. He just gave her permission to fuck other guys. So why is he upset?

You are by some distance the worst author on this site and that takes a special ability. Give it up man. 1*

He is cheated and let her still live in the same house??!! Are you brain sick or what??

Why would you keep her after all the cheating? Hope the baby is Larry's.

One of the worst. 1* !

would good old Danny even stay married to that slut ?

good to see a bit of dan emerge and the lying cheaters exposed. Hope they are gone.

I Hope the baby is Larry's . Either way I would kick the cheating wife to the curb . Does Dan think that She will be Faithful to him now.. I would not stay with the cheating wife because of the child .

Great writing- very erotic story

What kind of author is this? Are you a cuckold? What man can offer that? Five years of cheating and even at the wedding she cheats on him and the asshole won't annul the marriage? Either you're a Brit or you really are a cuckold!

Well, you really need to get your timeline straight. Did this all happen shortly after finding men or 10 years later? It makes it very hard to follow a story and a little unbelievable and how are you going to have paternity test until after she gives birth. He’s fucked in the eyes of the law anyway, they are married, the kid is his regardless of whose dick the sperm came out of, he needs to be in court, seeking a divorce, and adjudicating the paternity of the child before the child is born, but she fights him on it he could be stuck paying child support, regardless of paternity. So make sure you get the legal facts straight along with your timeline please.