by PoissonSurLaLune
I love the mature genre, especially when written from a woman's perspective, and this story fits the bill. Wonderful build-up and believable sex, though it could have kept going. Great job. I hope to see more.
Thank you for the very believable fantasy of two lovers. There is always room for hope.
and I can't believe your story did not meet your friends standards. Your story may have been a bit slow to begin with but you picked up the pace early and it flowed very well. I will look forward for more of your works.
The story line is very good, and Poisson can surely tell a believable, warm and sweet story. My objections were mere quibbles. Once a copy editor, always an opinionated son of a bitch.
Poisson certainly deserves praise for this story, and I hope for more from this talented storyteller.
Yes, better editing is needed, but this is still very, very good.
Five.