All Comments on 'Julie's Steamy Client'

Past tense is past tense. The use of 'would' is a failure in much US writing on this site.

Thank you for the feedback, I'll be sure to remain less passive in writing. I never claimed perfection, and I'm open to suggestions.

I was just about to write "why the "woulds" and saw that some other reader had just made a comment. Your usage of "woulds" reminds me of the type of writing I did when expounding on a similar subject and fantasy...it is counterproductive...as if you were saying, "I want this but I don't want it, and if I could have it, I might want it."

Just a comment. Keep on writing as you need to develop your style.

I appreciate the comment! I hope to post another story soon, and I have gone through most of it to switch the tense. I hope for it to flow better.