All Comments on 'Just a Blowjob'

You didn't need to apologize with the intro. Your description is exciting, but the first paragraph is confusing because of the sentence structure and the whole thing could benefit from a slower pace.

If you give head as well as you write about it You're amazing!

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Now this is more like it. Moments ago I read whore ch 2 and left a comment. Your improvement is amazing. But don;t neglect sounds and odors.

As one earlier commenter said, if you do the way you write about it, you are truly outstanding!

Of course there's room for some improvement, in areas of punctuation and sentence structure. My personal taste (.erm)

is stories that drag things out a little more, so that emotional and physical thrusts allow a little more fluidity and teasing. It occurs that you'd be a good author for a series of head shots, varying locations and body positions, etc. and the changes to the story they would bring.

Well done Emap! This was a great read. :)

Great description and very very hot! Thanks