All Comments on 'Just Imagine It'

A long read to find out that I didn’t like it very much.

This author must be a woman, there is no man that can explain the thrill of having men mandling a women naked body and understand the effect that gives to a women. I find this is not my cup of tea but also understand this might be the author cup of tea

Gawd. I don't like BTBs and favor a good reconciliation story but this Tim guy is a FUCKING IDIOT!!!

I want to punish you by giving a 2 or 3* but you write well so I can't do that.

Not up to your usual standard, well written, but the protagonist makes no sense.

I enjoyed the story, what a rollercoaster. I guess the guy was addicted to flitatious women, until he eventualy learnt his lesson. There must be men like that, but I can't immagine his charecter would do well in business.

I know some very likable businessmen, but they are all pretty astute.

some people can be good at business, but poor in love.

What a glutton for punishment

MC was really unable to decide his girlfriends/wives were not the kind of women he she be attracted too.

His indecision was painful. He was so obviously unable to react sensibly.

Nevertheless ... 5* ... a lesson in how not to live.

A well written story and it had you guessing for awhile. But I think your story was a bit weakend when the wife got back together with Tod asshole after the hotel incident. But I guess you painted her that way just a weak willed woman that got off by flirting and being touched by less than honorable men that were not her husband. A wife just does not go off with another man without permission from her husband. The same goes for a man. Of course that's just the way it was before this WOKE thing or this super liberal thing or the one in the 60s that said 'if it feels good it must be ok so just do it!" 5 stars

Read this submission and find the main character weak. Can't believe he married Janice when she thought playing around has no consequences. Still well written and a somewhat interesting tale. A reluctant 5*****

What a wimp,he should have dumped Janice after her session in the alley with the French kid.

Incredibly weak. No man this stupid could be successful in business. His ability to think things through was non existent. How many times did our esteemed writer use the phrase” I did not say anything, I did not know what to say, I could not move or react. Just very weak.because it was so incongruous. However, this writer produces this sort of over the top drivel very often. Sort of a repeat recipe for idiocy.

I read the whole story thinking that it might get better. Staying with Fiona might be excused by Tim being a horny teenager, but to watch Tom make out with her and stay with her defies logic. Giving Janice a second and then a third chance makes no sense. Apparently all other commenters are right that Brit’s are cucks.

Thanks for writing!

I would liked to have seen more BTB but a good story about a clueless wimp with no backbone

I read to the end so have to commend your writing for the most part despite some glaring errors. This is your universe and your characters, but the guy was an idiot from day one starring with Fiona. Then with his wife... seems like he likes cheating women. Weird characters...

In this long story, I found that the character Tim is simply an wimp if not a pussy who can't have a tight hold on his woman. This type of pathetic character deserves to be a cuckold. I hate them.

After reading this story and others by the author begs the question, are the men in the UK this weak willed and wimpy? Or is the author the exception?

If your a fan of cuckold, wimp, loser faggy men then this is for you. Got to page 3 and to quote the missis " What a pile of trash. I can only surmise that the author is writing about himself as no one could write such a pathetic loser without having real life experience."

Laughed my ass off. Not even worth rating.

Yes, that's how we know the British. The women whores and the men mostly the born cuckolds!

Gawd... is every "man" in the UK a pathetic cuckold? I swear, even the non-cuckold stories are actually cuckold stories. The MC was spineless, he should have kicked her out when he caught her in the alley with the frog, way back at the beginning of this long cuckold story.

Really too long and a seriously pathetic character

You’re very good at portraying pathetic, spineless, insipid, cuckolds …. You must be proud ……

And sorry no, I just can’t imagine it even though the ending with Tim ending up with Tod’s daughter was obvious from her first introduction at the tennis match.

Terrible. Slogged thru this but geez…. A slut girlfriend and a sult wife and a WACC…. At least Tod got what he deserved. But why the hell put up with his wife for so long? Dump her sorry ass after her second crossed line with Tod…. Oh wait the author is a Brit…. That explains it. Are there any real men left in the UK? Or all they just happy cucks? And what the hell is with calling sluts cows…

Disgusting moron

Couldn't stand to read all because it's a British the cuckold husband was also a wimp and afraid of the idiot that was playing him.

Should have dumped Janice long before he did.

Not your usual tongue in cheek style and longer. It had me squirming at the pain of the main character but I couldn't stop reading. Excellent!

Well, it would have been if Tod's wife had figured more prominently in the middle of the story.

I would have not let My Wife Disrespect Me that way .. I Love and respect My Wife and I expect the same from her .. Besides the guy was a Cluck and I hate cluck Stories

and I was happy to leave her comfortably looked after.

And why shouldnt the cuck reward the whore for cheating on him?

Why arent a bunch of people in jail?

Its illegal to fuck or marry the mentally retarded.

Everytime this cucks women cheat on him he "punishes" them by fucking them harder

Is it any wonder all the cunts feel like he likes it?

There were parts of this Story That I Loved .. Others Not so Much ..My Ex and I were at her Friends Party .. I caught her Kissing someone in One of the Bedrooms .. I walked out the door after telling her friend I was leaving .. Her Friend did not believe Me to Bad as She had to get a ride home with Her Mom . 2 hours later. Guess what Her Keys didn't work ..Then Her Mom Begged me to take her back .. I did until I saw The Hickey on her Tit ..

This was so bad that I actually gave up reading it after ch 05. I could not believe a story could be written about such a sad excuse for a male. Right from school days the guy was a total loser in every way. A wimp of the first magnitude who did not seem to have the common sense he was born with. And the continual besting he accepted from Tod. Come on give us a break. And the story just went on and on with Willy Wimp coming on the losing end of every situation involving wives or girlfriends.

But I got tired of skipping over the protagonist's ridiculous conversations with himself and his unpardonable naïveté.

Must admit I prefer a guy who is better at evaluating such situations seeing thru the bs. It was obvious his gf was jerking him around, but he was young. It was pretty obvious his wife was double trouble, should have dropped her after the 1st encounter.

After the way Janice treated him,why should he give her a reasonable divorce.He should have screwed her as far as he could to get the message across.

Critics fail to see the whole picture. Britease is a very good writer and a Brit. The US writers in general, not all, tend to exaggerate but the UK writers are more realistic. I have enjoyed all Britease’s stories mainly due to the fact they are realistic as in, the hero is not the perfect man. Give me more and I will continue to give 5 stars.

It caught me by surprise, but now I believe the others that you cannot write a story without the protagonist being a pansy.

opined that the best of manhood of Britain left in 395 AD to participate in the sack of Rome, and never returned, and this is why the remaining dregs of manhood were unable to resist the invasions of the Angles, Saxons, and Jutes. Hmmm. Were so many British men slaughtered in the world wars that there are now no actual men left for you to know and write about?

Sorry but this was the worst character I have ever read. Not badly written but boy was stupid.

Why read through 7 pages to tell us the writer is not worth reading. Doesn't that even seem just a little bit weird? Even to yourself. I read one page and I know if I want to continue. If not, on to the next story. But to read 7 pages and then crap on the story, well just seems odd. I think Bretise is a fine writer. It's not all blood, guts, and veins in your teeth here. Some of the best quality stories are what the are. Simply a journey the author is taking you on.

You should noted that in the beginning. 1-star for wimp cuckold nonsense. Real men do not behave like that, I imagine some could, probably the writer himself but this is not worth reading.

since it's difficult for me to conceptualize putting up with tod and janice's behavior. but overall, good story (must have been since i read it all).

... the revenge was pretty pathetic. Too remote, too sanitary. Needed to be something like the daughter having to come to him to keep her father out of jail and offering to prostitute herself. Something really NASTY! :o)

Agree 100% with Schwanze

Half way through the story I had to check if I accidentally clicked on Matt Moreau. Wtf was going on in this story? Fiona don't you cheat on me! Oh you're already cheating on me, well don't cheat me again! What again you cheated on me? Well don't you it again! Oh okay I forgive you last time I swear.

Rinse and Repeat for the wife. Seriously man. Not sure how I felt about the revenge. It was good, but was it really worth it?

finish it. Tell the guys wife and then tell the little cunt to piss off. Seriously, there was never a time in my young life when me or anyone I know would have put up with this shit. Another 1. Working from top to bottom easy Brit is on a roll.

I really hated this story of a wimp with absolutely no balls or spine. He even got his revenge by doing absolutely nothing but taking an opportunity presented by another.

He deserved everything he got as he was lead by all his women by his cock, which could not have been that great as they kept leaving him. It was also sooo predictable, he allowed Tod every liberty and deserved every humiliation.

I have never read a story by you where I really wanted the "Heroes" ass to be kicked so soundly he would never require his tonsils to operated on.

1* and if there were a MINUS mark you would have got that.

I have the feeling that tim never really loved janice to begin with,the fact that he threw her to the wolves despite the blackmail leaves me uneasy

It's a pretty good read though not exactly my cup of tea,sorry

What goes around comes around - a very good double revenge on Tod. Loved his comment that Tod won't screw the latest wife.

Janice was a naive fool who was thrown to the wolves by Tim. At the end he had the nerve to say "I never wished her any ill", Of course he did by his actions.

He pissweak excuse to toss her "I could maybe have forgiven her infidelity, I don't really know. But not with Tod" If it had been with anyone but Tod, yes I agree. But he intimately knew how Tod behaved and that Tod finally got his way with Janice only by blackmail.

Tim was a weak character, excused with Fiona by his youth. No excuse for latter day actions.

Not much more to say.

you should be ashamed-----don't you ever learn, TK U MLJ LV NV

He should have told the wife about Tod and Fiona when he was a teenager, and definitely later on, there's been no mention of them having an open marriage, and if they had the protagonist didn't know, and only someone bloody stupid wouldn't realise how much that could screw up Tod's life, even better if he could have gotten Sheila into bed out of spite.

Wasn't a bad bit of revenge though, with the business and the daughter (would have been even better if she had been a virgin to make up for what happened with Fiona), but he had good options way earlier, and no reason not to double dip, both would have stacked quite nicely.

A tale of sexuality. Fiona exploited young love and shook his self confidence, from which he never really recovered. He and his wife started with exhibitionism, which turned them both on, her more than him. The Frenchman in the alley showed his wife leading the charge into debotchery, and while it arroused him, the pain of what to him was betrayal was dominant. To Janet, it was a quick, exciting fling with, ofer and done in a few minutes. She loved her husband no less.

Of course the Tim/ Tod dynamic is the glue that binds the plot, I'm in small town politics, and forced to work with a person I dispise, and who dispises me in like measure. However, it obscures and distracts us from the rapidly diverging sexuality between Janet and Tim.

Janet's interest in Tod, may be just he's a good looking man, who feeds her exhibitonist fetish, and lose morals.

The pool scene was the marriage killer. You might have given him a full bladder when Saint Timothy showed up, saw his wife naked in the pool, he should have pissed on her. Had the pool scene taken place without Tods involvement, I think it would have equally a marriage breaker, as she needed multiple sex partners, and he wanted a monogamous wife.

The ending was good. The wife found a man who could accept her sexuality, and he a woman whose sexuality matched his.

Excellent story

While well written the husband in this story comes across as one of the stupidest guys to ever walk the face of the earth. I know he got revenge but if he had simply possessed a pair to begin with so much pain could have been avoided all around.

That setence: ""Well at least this is one of my women that you'll never get to fuck," I responded, but the look of defeat on his face made me regret saying it.", make It worth to read this long story...4*

I'm surprised he didn't read her the riot act earlier or throw her to the curb. Her actions definitely showed disrespect for him even it he partially accepted it

You pushed all my buttons. I took your advice and read from start to finish. I discovered I have read some of your other stories, all well written.

Thanks, thanks for pissin me off. Evan though I havent had any of Tims experiences, can you imagine, oh mabey you can.

it definitely was not too long. You took the needed time to develop it all.

Well done

Glad I stuck with it!

"Well at least this is one of my women that you'll never get to fuck," I responded, but the look of defeat on his face made me regret saying it."

No regrets, as Tod himself said, he deserved that!

If it's all so "innocent" and "fun", how come old hubby hasn't been told about this?

We all know how it turns him on, so why not tell him?

Not that logic is common currency here, that she would go ANYWHERE with Tod after the other incident.

So either she is terminally stupid (definitely common here!), or she is a cheating slut, even if she hasn't fucked anyone else, YET!

Why not tell her why he doesn't like Tod?

I'll bet anything Janice is going to cheat with Tod.

I just finished Page One, and I know Tim is young, but he should a),tell Fiona that she is a cheating slut and that they are through, and b) tell Sheila what Tod is doing.

but I wouldn't know. I quit reading before the end of the first page. When good old Fiona and Tod started in on the couch, Tim should have walked out the door and never looked back. What a pussy.

For most of the story Tim was a hapless moron. I got tired of him constantly coming off as a "oh poor me" sod. Why didn't he ever think to tell Tods' wife he was messing with Fiona? Why did it take SO long for him to realize Janice was a cheating slut? Why didn't he realize early on that Tod was his enemy? Where was Tim's father in all this? Couldn't he have spoken to his father when he was young and gotten some good fatherly advice? If Tim was smart enough to build up such a large and successful business, he would have needed to be a lot smarter than you portrayed him. Well written story, but Tim was just too spineless for me to enjoy the story. In the end you gave him a fairy tale ending but that was too little, too late.

Tod, Gwen, Fiona, Janice... they were opportunists. The only villain in this story was Tim. And the saddest part he was only an enemy to himself.

And the story closed with Tim remaining the villain. Sad and idiotic tale.

I am going down Britease's stories alphabetically. So far his earlier works ARE NOT impressive. I continually am left to wonder if most British males are weak; mind and body.

I will admit that those I have met or served with definitely do not fall into Britease's written ideal of maledom. I'd say they were a little more forceful in their reactions to similar matrimonial events. I have met a few who have been divorced...some even more than once. Our life was definitely not for everyone.

When I first started reading this story I was little up set that tim just stood around and let Tod royally screw is girl friend Fiona and layer on his wife Janice. Susan mentioned that he might not ne a wimp however he let's 2 of his women get screwed by Tod the villian. I would have liked tim to have told Tods wife about Fiona and then screw her in a revenge fuck. Also later on in the story tim needed to screw any woman and keep them that Tod cared for. I did also suspect tim would get with Tod's daughter at some some point in the story. As you put it he would not want to screw this one !

Janice needed to be BTB and of course it would have been good for tim to meet up with Fiona's child ( only of it was a girl ) and fuck her as well. Tim could have done all this through he growing business empire.

I don't care how much you love them, if you can't straighten them out get rid of them, one way or another. Yes, it's just a story but it pissed me off. Tod deserved much worse than he got. It is OK to fuck a married woman (IMO) but to slap her husband in the face with it deserves killing (and I would have done it or had it done). Even with Fiona.

I've been re-rreading your stuff since there's such a dearth of decent fair on this site recently. I think you are one of the best at building tension. You are also great at walking the line of reconciliation through love and forgiveness, and dumping the bitch when it's warranted. If you write again soon, though, i'd like to see a story where the woman is more than a charicature. Just a thought

Keep writing

Wulf

Nice writing but this boy is simply retarded, what he needed was a friend to smack some sense into him, I kept hoping that at some point in the story he would become a man but alas his balls never showed.

Quite a long read but well worth it in the end. I was outraged the leading character wasn't more 'Alpa' to the trying situations but your skill as an author kept me reading and feeling empathy . Savvy intertwining of mixing succinct tales of matters of business and heart got me to the end where at long last a measure of retribution was garnered. TY much for your time, humor and effort expended to make this story conglomerate from the ether of your imagination .

Todd fucked his life every decade, ruining his youth and enjoying his own youth completely. Tim says he got revenge but when? Marrying his daughter is not revenge. Finance for whom he need money anymore. His daughter is safe with wimp. His wife does not have anything to with him. And for People like Todd it does not matter if his wife is running around. In his age he does not need money. He lived joyfully, sexually setisfied, fucking his enemy throughout his life and finally died peacefully. So where is REVENGE. You create a life in decade and someone comes and destroy it within weeks. Tim lived miserable youth and middle age life.

SORRY very wimpy

Amazing that a fine writer like Britease would turn out this despicable story about Tim, an incredibly stupid wimp, who keeps marrying adulterous sluts who have sex with that epitome of evil, Tod, while Tim keeps stuttering and stumbling around trying to figure out whch end is up.

60 year old George

it seems, is difficult for some to see. But your protagonsit cetainly seemed incapable of seeing it until he gets a DVD of it after seeing her naked with Tod and having been doing it for weeks on Thursdays. Did he not know that 1 + 1 = 2 together. Also, I know teenage boys are a little hormonally stupid, but your protagonist was beyond naive and stupid. He spent his life not seeing what was right in front of him and then gets angry about it. He is rather pathetic actually. Your are a great writer, but he was just too unbelivable to accept. Tod made more sense than him.

The was a very good story, as are most Britease stories. It's interesting to see how the concept of the "hero" differs between cultures. As an American, I agree that parts of the story were difficult to read, as I wanted the protagonist to be more dynamic. But I understand that in most European cultures the hero of a story is usually someone who works within the system, not someone who works alone out of selfish interest. Actually, America could use more of that mentality, and fewer people who "do their own thing". Anyway, thanks for the story, and please keep writing them.

Astonished to see an old story of mine suddenly propelled back into the top ten comments section.

What caused that? Why are some peole so over serious?

As many of your readers have said, Tim is portayed as the most pathetic wimp in any story I have ever read.I read the last four pages only because I was waiting to read about Tim kicking Tod in the balls or castrating him. Even nude Gwen belted Tod while Tim stood around twiddling his thumbs. Can't say I enjoyed the story. It was just too irritating.

the Ct. Yankee

Talk about a non man.

Depending upon the point of view of story everyone here is a ass without a name, including the ones with the clever little names they gave themselves. That's what this site is all about even if the asswithoutaname below me is to stupid to figure that out. I didn't like this story much either, so what?

the ass w/o a name won't read any more of the stories writen. We would all be extratic if he/she would stop writing reviews and go fuck him/her self.

Literotica should have better standards then to allow garbage like this on their site. Reading this was a complete waste of my time and I shall never read anymore from this author.

OK, I couldn't finish it. It was about a pathetic man who picks narristic women who love to abuse him. First, youth was no excuse for what he didn't to to good ol tod. I rarely give a story 0, I respect the effort going into it, but this one surpases stupdity. Too much whinning and completely increduous actions and lack of brains by the supposedly intellgent business man. Really wanted to see him grow a set, he almost did with the Frenchie. I guess you Brits can only grow them against the French.

As a person who hails from the same country as this author may I apologise on behalf of the rest of us, for his wimp stories, this is not how the average Englishman would react!!!

Are all you guys dickless? Geez, I trained w/Brit soldiers when I was in Germany and didn't realize they wore panties.

It is great to read about people you can really like! Tim, Fran, Gwen, Janice and especially Tod and company were all stering!

that for a story to be successful it must have at least one likeable character. I could not find one character in this story likeable. I tried to like Tim thru his trials and struggles but all of his problems were caused by him. Let's take Fiona. Who lets a "girlfriend" be groped and fondled by your boss while she denies you the same access? It seems to set the stage for the rest of his life. Now Janice was a real piece of work. She goes out with a Frenchman acting like a prick tease (remember all he got out of it was blue balls) during their vacation. Like a moth to a flame she teased and flirted with other men until the expected happened. She goes back to the same group of men who supposely almost rape her to play more strip tease games with them. Yet every time she is caught she pleads that she can not help herself and she did not fuck them. What about Tim's reputation in the business community and among his workers? So what happens in the end? Tim ends up with the little girl he babysat. Janice got the overt cuckold husband that she always wanted and Gwen got the respectabilty she wanted by marrying the Vicar (don't he check the local gossip). Too much blame was placed on Tod. After all none of women were forced (I do not count the DVD of Janice as blackmail because she put herself in that situation). After Tod repeatedly screw with her she trusts him not to sent the DVDs? ComeOn! Despite the comments above and the score you are a good writer - it is just what you wrote in this case reflects either an incredibly stupid guy or someone who is not honest in what he really wanted by blames everyone else.

Janice was a slut from day one. Tim was an idiot before that. There can't be a man alive that is that dumb even tho he waS British. He was a DUMB WIMP and deserved everything he got. I left the story 5 times and after thinking about it I had to return just to see what dumb thing Tim was going to do next. BAD STORY Well written

The story was well written and had a principal character, but it wanted a hero. Regrettably there was no hero and little passion, other that by the female cheaters.

In keeping with the tenor of the story, when the leading character says, "this is one woman you won't get to fuck."

The father should respond, "That won't be necessary, I already have."

wto enjoy a story i have to be intrested in one or the other subjects he is more than a wimp....if he was my friend,id bitch slap him till he cried make him put on pink girls underware untill his balls re-apeared then help him move on with his life....why was janice not left in the pool while the locks were changed at the house,,,why is tod not walking with a limp caused by a beating with a bat, way back when

All I can come up with as far as the story being entertaining it sure doesnt seem to have anyone who is even interesting<P> I read Risq comments and he is right on target but I just found it so unbelievable that anyone would think others could relate being so dumb and taken for a ride all their lives, and still find that entertaining. It would seem you would need to be in total denial of a depressed personality and maybe into BDSM/submissive to enjoy this scenario portrayed here. <P>It was well-constructed just unbelievable.<P>PT

If I was a friend of Tim's I would ask if he wanted to be put out of his misery. He is a wimp. The only reason Carol hasn't slept around on him, is because the story ended. Financial ruin is not revenge for infidelity. Castration or death is. But Tim is a wimp would watches his girlfriend make out with a married man and never tells the wife. Then his wife makes out with a french guy and he does nothing. Talking is doing nothing. Then the same wife has orgies with Tod and Tim divorces her. Wow Tim are you ever strong? Wimp!!! You are the biggest wimp I have ever read about. And the author says he is a hero. Bullshit real people, people who are not even heroes would not put up with the shit that Tim lets happen. Garage story although it was well written. It was completely unbelievable. Please stop writing stories like this.

It's hard to understand why Tim never told Janice about his history with Tod and that she should stay away from him. Not too smart. It's also hard to understand why they're living in a fairly large city that Tim's company can only find work with Tod's company. I would think he would go completely out of his way to find other companies to work with. And Tim can only be attracted to women that are completely selfish and only think of themselves. Good writing skills and I hope to see more of your work here...

The set up was indeed way over the top.

Great story. It was great to see Tod defeated. I really like Tim marrying Carol and love the line " At least this one of my women you won't fuck"

This was a believable story of the typical man born post 70s and my guess is the author falls into that date range as well. We were taught that to get the right kind of woman, you had to be a gentle, sensitive guy who never fought. Only a life experience that shows you the folly of being such a pussy and destroys the "man" you were can drive you to recreate yourself into tough, while honest, man who will fight for what is right and what he believes in and has no fear of driving a stake in the heart of the S.O.B.s in his life. I didn't like the character at first, but I saw his progression.

Risq's comments about all of the characters are true, but somehow I liked this story. It seemed like a bad dream to me - always part way out of control. Living well is truly the best revenge!

That the wimp ended up with Tod's little daughter the wimp used to babysit?, a woman Tod won't have sex with, our hero grins big time! LOL <p>

Who the fuck says Tod can not have sex with his own daughter, just to screw the wimp's mind, one more time for old time sake? After all, our hero claimed he had royally fucked Tod's life: business gone, wife gone, posh living gone.... <p>

So the wimp considered himself really lucky he ended up with a woman HE THINKS safe from old Tod's dick, eh? This man is stupid like a earthworm... <p>

I think the author should really might as well take this lame story to some extreme conclusion, and have daddy Tod fuck his little girl, and see if the wimp's gonna have enough gut to kill himself, and BLAME Todd for it by writing a letter to Todd's daughter (wimp's wife): <p>

"Dear beloved Carol --- is that her name?, Carol? --- I can't live any more, 'cuze your father fucked every woman I've ever got myself attached to. I tried being a good man all my life, starting when I first met your mother and your father, with my first girlfriend, whom your father royally fucked weeks after having met her,,, taking her virginity and bragging it to me, leaving me not knowing what to do.... and a whole bunch of women in between,,, all the way to you, the last... I just can't take it anymore, so I have to say goodbye. Tell you dad he won, okay?" <p>

Dear author, why not do something like that? Now, THAT I'd have to admire, because the story, THEN, would be truly consistent, from beginning to end. But this story of the wimp grinning like a total retarded idiot: "I score big this time around: marrying his daughter, a woman he can't fuck." <p>

So are you saying it's LUCK that saved the wimp, NOT any thing he's able to do, not any other woman he's able to meet, that could/would love him enough NOT to fuck Todd? That it had to be Tod's own daughter, whom Tod doesn't want to fuck? How do we know that? How does the stupid wimp know that, being as stupid as he is...?

The author is well intentioned in writing this story. It is clearly written and has a rather surprising, enjoyable ending which includes an update on the lives of some of the story's participants. But why, for cry sack, does Britease have to have such a weak leading male in the story. I think that the husband really did not much care for wife Janice, and that perhaps is why he let things get way out of hand. I mean, what husband would let a wife carry on with men, in several situations, as Janice did? Tim should have crashed Tod's face there in Tod's back year. He may have also been physically attacked by Tod's side kicks but, in his mind, and probably that of his wife, he would have come out the winner in the battle. But, no, he does nothing. At least poor Gwen did smack Tod. All in all not a very enjoyable read for me because I really got my adrenaline up over the husband's wimpy behavior and had to take a long walk afterward to wear the effects of the adrenaline off. RAG

While the story was *generally* well-written, it seemed to be populated by people I really didn't like; and why did the husband keep the wife around after it was clear she was too stupid to realize she was playing with cheating? The whole premise just made little sense.<p>In addition, this tale is told with about 60% more words than are needed. It could have been pared back, some silly scenes removed, and generally rendered clearer with some (fairly brutal) editing.<p>Worth a rewrite, perhaps, but for now this deserves an F.