All Comments on 'Just What the Doctor Ordered'

In which case, read stories here on Lit that have dialogue, pace, humor, and sensuality. Alas, none of this shows up in this story. Not that you can't develop a talent for erotica, and this may be one of those that you hide from your biographer, but work on the above suggestions.

an awesome story so very hot and very horny. love it . now the next part.# with the doctor. i am sure its going to be as good or even better. great writing. pure guinus .

Story has good promise, you seemed to get some parts muddled though so made it difficult to completely follow along. Great effort though

Do us all a favor and quit writing stories, if this is the best you can do.

Don’t listen to anyone else. This is amazing