All Comments on 'Kaitlin Closes The Deal Ch. 03'

so she can get started working as a whore/businesswoman? Well-written but standard cheating wife crap.

note the changes

chpt1:

"her wonderful husband" to

"her husband Brian had not touched her body in four weeks" (only 1 month) to

"she would land the account without actually cheating on her husband."

chpt2: "her husband Brian had lost his high paying job a few months ago."

the revised "The lack of sexual attention from her husband Brian over the last couple of months" (from the 1st chpter where is only 1 month - continuity check!).

and from not wanting to cheat to "Kaitlin had always wanted to do a slow sexy strip tease for a man other than her husband" and she gives Carlos a blowjob....

chpt3: "She had never cheated on Brian before, but it was his fault" (riiiight, all his fault.) off to intercourse, then being kept women.

and all this happens withing a few days. GaryDouglass you need to work on continuity BETWEEN chapters so that you not changing the story, and you need to work on realistic timing. going from "wonderful husband" to "its all his fault that she is becoming a kept woman" is a bit unrealistic.

Give it up. Go write a essay for junior high and learn something from it.

Lost your way continuity wise - bad as that was - she still loved her husband - well probably or maybe - after her lesbian and DP should he get a job and like to watch from now on perhaps they could stay married.

This never happens in true business - does it? Yes, but they use whores - OH

Good but you can't take this from her loving her husband to Her cheating is all his fault. One can make anyone cheat, she chose to, but the problem here is you don't tell why the change. It it was because she thought she had to risk every thing to get this account then that should have been the reason. But where do you go with this now? Is hubby a winp Or are you they type of writter that will show cheat dose not pay and bet winning the accunt looses her husband and marriage,,,, as it should