by ivvin
I love it! Great writing skill and use of words! Two thumbs way up! Please write more!
After a long hectic day at work a man and woman bump into each other. After they share time together, culimating in a sweet erotic interlude. Well Written. Enjoyable!
There were some very good helpful comments given. Keep writing as you have a flair that needs to be expressed.
Thank you for the entertainment.
I do think it belongs in Erotic Couplings instead of Romance. Romance has to do with love in my mind and the word was never implied by ether of them.
Huh, I thought your story was quite good. Could have done with a bit more detail, but none the less a good story.
I am interested to see what you write next...
your story used no quote conversation, nor much conversation at all.
it had no present tense, was very historical.
it was a bit dull. you might want to look up the how to's here.
HAs been mentioned on the New Story Review thread in the Author's Hangout Forum.