All Comments on 'Katie's First'

This is a great story for your first one here on literotica. I especially like the first timer stories. We all got one, just some of ours is better then others. Hope yours was this great. Hope you have more to share.

You rushed through it. You need to slow down the action a little bit.

You have good writing skills, and your imagination is controllably arousing. Spend a little more time on editing, and concentrate on embellishing your action. It's your story, take the reader where you want them to go Looking forward to reading more stories

In my opinion, you could have spent more time developing the characters and actually establishing some kind of a story line. You have the writing skills to do it, so take your time. Some of the best stories on here take the time to immerse the reader in the story so they they feel more of a personal "affection" for the characters.

Keep workin... you'll get it right

great writing skills but develop your story more, very... Good skills indeed

I loved this soo much, it is so sexy!

Riiiight.

Maybe this belongs in the "Non-Human stories" section of the site?