All Comments on 'Kennedy's Girl'

When I got to the end I was really glad to see the words - end of part 1.

I see it was your first story on Literotica and it was great and I'm glad to see there is be a part 2 to enjoy.

That was totally hot. Looking

forward to the next chapter. This

one really gets me.

There was some awkward use of language and you need a copyeditor (Lit has a volunteer editor program, and taking advantage of it will help your writing shine even more), but the sex was sizzling! Keep writing!

Sounds like the beginning of a good series and I'm looking forward to reading it

Perfect length, with a nice slow build up, and then intensely erotic love making. I'm all wet! Let's see chapter 2

would love to see them all the way to old age as a couple not just A l.u.g. and her friend of the time. (l.u.g.) lesbian until graduation

Combine my lover was reading literotica N rugby . playing for 3 years now nothing better then women rugby

Loved the way the story built and the rugby link.

Trying to tell s story from two separate first person views is tricky and, ss here can get awkward. I agree with the advice about finding an editor: it's always good to get another person's view before publication.

Please, please continue the story.

That was amazing. I loved the build up!! It slowly developed into something incredibly sexy and hot!! Keep up the good work. I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter!!

Really enjoyed a well constructed story of a first time hook up. The build up was excellent and had me looking for more. Trust yourself with your writing skills as far as the actual sex scenes go though. Perhaps it got a little trite whereas your skill in the build up suggests you could do more to make this less of a scream fest.

I expected something more tentative when they finally got together... But Drew seemed to totally embrace the experience :)

I worry more for Kennedy, for a "player" she has totally fallen.

Loved it!

Thanks everyone for all the kind comments, all the tips, and constructive criticism! I really appreciate it! :) :)

Loved this... You are great!

When do we get the next installment? :)

Really enjoyed this one - great, likeable characters, great build-up & top notch climax at the end.

Very much looking forward to part 2!

I felt a bit like Drew - "I'm not gay" !

But oh gosh you made my mind twist and turn all night long after reading your story !

and you have an incredible way to built up the sexual tension !

and you describe their kisses with amazing precision !

loved it !

thank you so much !

and please, write us some more stories !

Really like how both views are put into play! AMAZING!

Simply excellent work. Characters have life and move as humans will.

It a great story please finish it!

Can't wait for what is to come.7892

I wish there was a sequel. 🙂

That story rocks!!!

I found that scene hot where she almost gets the girl but has to masturbate to fulfill her desires.