by storytyme
Idiots who leave the negative comments don't even realize they're only hurting themselves by discouraging new & old writers to continue contributing. What jackasses.
I thought this story was good. The sex was well written. The lead-in was good too. It was perfectly acceptable. I didn't notice any grammar mistakes but then again, I'm not an idiot who's on a porn site critiquing a submission for spelling and grammer. Good grief.
To Storytyme, good work. I hope you'll continue. This was a good story. For purely selfish reasons I hope you'll continue to write these and include more voyeuristic moments. That's just my personal preference but you did a great job writing this.
Thank you!
Give that sexy Brian some chest hair -- I guarantee she will love the feeling of his "spooning" against her back!! And, tracing her fingers through the silky and soft hair of his chest will be an additional turn-on for him and for her!