All Comments on 'Kristina'

GREAT START. kEEP GOING AND LET US KNOW HOW IT GOES FOR HER

i can't wait for the next chapter, that was hot

Ok please hurry up with the next chapter, i cant wait to find out what happens.

Loved this story

I stopped liking it when i questioned how all that could happen on a jam packed elevator

what I would give to be taken and used by women like that. I am in the process of giving myself an almighty orgasm

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...it is completely ruined by a total lack of sentence structure, the use of commas and periods. Which is odd, as the first two paragraphs were written very well otherwise.

After that though, the sentences are run-ons, and they either just stop short or blend with the following sentences, which makes it hard to follow the story. Much less keep a hard-on!

If a person is going to write a story, then know how to write!

And a minor thing, is that in the US we use the words 'ass' and 'elevator,' not 'arse' and 'lift.' And she's not a housewife, as she has no house with her husband. She is a new bride or just simply a wife.

I don't mean to be rude or insulting. I like the plot, but it needs a lot of editing.

A subtle touch - which leads to curiosity - which leads to seduction.

This was assault which led to more assault.

Complete turn-off.

It's Good, but the spelling isn't lol

OFF is the word for OF

and CROTCH is the word for Crutch

Other than that- the story is good