by cumduck
It's Good, but the spelling isn't lol
OFF is the word for OF
and CROTCH is the word for Crutch
Other than that- the story is good
A subtle touch - which leads to curiosity - which leads to seduction.
This was assault which led to more assault.
Complete turn-off.
...it is completely ruined by a total lack of sentence structure, the use of commas and periods. Which is odd, as the first two paragraphs were written very well otherwise.
After that though, the sentences are run-ons, and they either just stop short or blend with the following sentences, which makes it hard to follow the story. Much less keep a hard-on!
If a person is going to write a story, then know how to write!
And a minor thing, is that in the US we use the words 'ass' and 'elevator,' not 'arse' and 'lift.' And she's not a housewife, as she has no house with her husband. She is a new bride or just simply a wife.
I don't mean to be rude or insulting. I like the plot, but it needs a lot of editing.
what I would give to be taken and used by women like that. I am in the process of giving myself an almighty orgasm
I stopped liking it when i questioned how all that could happen on a jam packed elevator
Ok please hurry up with the next chapter, i cant wait to find out what happens.
Loved this story