by exfireman
So much bs but it's real. What a joke! The old I better take all my clothes off so I don't get milk on them. Hahahaha!! Yeah you're right it's unbelievable. This is about as real as a Penthouse Forum story.
No way is this real you jackass! Oh! And learn to write!
I found the story particularly pleasing but I find that you went in to the events within a small number of paragraphs. A great story is one that slowly builds up to a satisfying climax that leaves the reader feeling good about the story as well as their own amusement. This... is rushed. If you were purposefully trying to make a quick-jerk kind of story then you succeeded, but if you want to create stories that have a meaning to them... add more.
Much more.
i could not read this past the point of the 1st female undressing herself, this story has ruined my fantasy it sucked so bad
I didn't buy that it was real, but otherwise enjoyed it very much. Very arousing use of lactation.
Don't pretend a story is true unless you have the writing skill to make it seem like it could be. It'd be better if you hadn't tried for the "True Story" angle, woeful dialogue aside.
Yeah, right - it happened this very afternoon. Sorry I couldn't be there but Prince Phillip's wife was giving me head at the time.
but 'grinded' :) ? Pretty story - even better for being real - 4 *s.