by Harddaysknight
It seems that Gwen is awfully egocentric and lacking in empathy. Even Steve showed a bit of jealousy here...
I have to stop every few paragraphs to control the laughter. How over the top can one story get!? I think we're gonna find out by the end of this one. This is like a teen romance novel written by Tom Clancy.
A previous poster stated that the story was over the top, perhaps that poster has not read all of your stories. They are all over the top, they can be very funny, and at the same time they often touch deep feelings about situations in peoples real lives and those they wish they led.
Thanks again.
This story is so damn cheesy it'll probably rival Dominos' cheese burst pizza. The extra gooey kinda cheese. If this were a pizza I'd be 200kgs by now. (I'm 75kg btw ;)
-Rk-
This story isn't "cheesy" in any way. It's great!
I've had to read it twice it's so good!
Cute drivel. Otherwise Steve would have already fucked Paula, be teaching Gwen anal sex, and had a threesome with Lisa and Kate. That would be hot, but no less bullshit then the star quarter back, lady killer, Taliban slayer, Fred Astaire dancer, all around Mr. Perfect boyfriend so far portrayed. Its all good. At least Steve isn't drilling Paula's ass while her husband whimpers at the foot of the bed hope to eat Steve's cream pie and suck Steve's dick! I'll take this cute drivel any day over that cuck shit. Write on.
I read some good HDK's stories. it doesn't seem possible that he is the one writing this.
Your comment made me laugh out loud and now half the people in the room are glancing at me like I'm crazy.
Couldn't agree more though, cheesy over willing cuckold every time.
Too funny...I just had the same issue after reading your comment and scrolling down for Anons comment!
People looking at me wondering why a 50 year old man is laughing his ass off in the food court.
Thanks for pointing it out!
C
Despite all the negs here, so far the ideal unreal situation has had me in tears several times! Ignore the smutsayers!
The most strikingly unrealistic element is how Gwen is fine with every woman in her family being all over Steve going as far as to kiss him and sit on his lap, but as soon as she discusses a movie star she seems to get reprimands from everyone and Steve is jealous... Interesting developement....
and HDK is reading the comments.
Just like we are reading the story.
That's enough for me... No way in the world i can read another 100 chapters of this nonsense... Peace out...
-jaye-
Sorry, got to the same point. Gotta stop here. What happened to our witty and ironic HDK!?
When did Ted have the brain transplant to be able to make that speech.?
In real life whilst Steve was fondling her breasts,she would have had his dick out wanking him off.Why didn't the author include that.?
If Steve had said anything to Qwen about her raving about Nick ,she would have got mad and said he was jealous causing more problems.Thank goodness for Lisa.How did Lisa leave Steve, yet thirty minutes later she was changed and ready to dance?.
I had a Girlfriend whose ex was in the Special forces . She bragged about him so much that I dumped her . I had warned her as had her mother that she was killing our relationship . She did end up having 2 kids by her ex but he never married her . She expected Me to marry her and take care of his kids for him and her . Guess what I married a nice girl who gave Me 1 Daughter
Twists and turns in such a gentle way but I'm expecting more serious issues to arise.
Have to love Kate and Paula for running interference, although despite that, both Gwen and Steve almost got caught! At least Gwen stayed true to her story origins here.
The story proffered us truth about the male ego: no guy wants to hear about how "wonderful" another guy is--especially if we're dating the woman in question now.
Lisa having the dance with Steve was an interesting interlude, after he performed at the football combine.
There's the almost-spat with Stanford vs. Navy. Typical, but the story already hinted Steve has Navy in his blood and suggested he'd become a Seal. Gwen shouldn't have been so shocked.
A little more grounded here. 5
The constant semi perv chatter became cloying after a while. Reads like it was written by an old man licking his chops at his fantasy, while trying to play it off as wholesome banter.