All Comments on 'Lara's End Of School Examination'

Now that was a great story,keep up the good writing

The best story yet. Could have had more arse licking and tongue in the hole but still a great story.

Hahaha

Could do with a bit of editing but I was enjoying it right up until the final paragraph, which felt like a bit of an afterthought and added nothing to the story. In fact, It detracted from it as far as I'm concerned.

I think you could easily end the story with the exchange between the doctor and the nurse and leave the whole stronger for it.

If you want to keep the thing of the other girls jostling, how about writing a follow-up to this story, maybe with Lara forced to watch/participate in more abuse of her classmates? People have published far worse and got paid for it.

Could do with a bit of editing but I was enjoying it right up until the final paragraph, which felt like a bit of an afterthought and added nothing to the story. In fact, It detracted from it as far as I'm concerned.

I think you could easily end the story with the exchange between the doctor and the nurse and leave the whole stronger for it.

If you want to keep the thing of the other girls jostling, how about writing a follow-up to this story, maybe with Lara forced to watch/participate in more abuse of her classmates? People have published far worse and got paid for it.