by bembamember
Then saved myself the time and moving on, to the next story.
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Another LAZY author who uses apostrophe's instead of quotation marks for dialog. Pure laziness.
The thing about a story with a "to be continued...", it never is. It's a tool that authors use when they're too darn lazy to finish a story, and are impatient to get feedback with what they've written so far. Shame really. Oh well, this comment isn't quite finished, 'to be continued...'
Shows promise. I think your detractors are being a little hard on you. Sounds like she wants to fuck him and I think you have the skill to bring it off. Hubby isn't satisfying her. So she wants her son to. The motivation is there. So go to it.
I agree it was too short to really qualify as a true chapter, but the writer did warn this wasn't a complete story. It's not bembamember's fault you can't read.
your an a** either give us readers the story or don't. This was all/only intro - no story here.
It is just barely a beginning. It has possibilities but this was too little.