All Comments on 'Lily's Independence Day'

Thank you, eselen, for sharing this piece with us and welcome to Literotica - it's nice to be the first to say that and I hope you enjoy it here and bring us lots more fine stories like this one!

Well done - five stars.

used the word charming to describe a lit story. Add whimsical, playful, fun, refreshing and stimulating (along with a lot of other adjectives I can't think of right now) and you have perfection.

Technicals are nailed, dialog is excellent, action moves, both characters are lovable, and all that makes for magic! No strum and drang here -- just pure good writing. I particularly enjoyed your phrasing -- very sophisticated.

I don't know if you can ask more of an author. A pure delicious and lighthearted delight. Thanks so much eselen -- the highest mark for ur effort. The challenge is -- can you top this?

PS: And how u did this and worked it into a bdsm story is true genius.

I hope there's a part II coming!

Cannot wait! Loved it

fabulous 1st submission!

Fantastic...what lovely fireworks on display...

love to see this continued but understand the title's meaning.

What a wonderful story...please tell me there is a part II. Welcome to Literotica...well written story. Loved your descriptions very refreshing and very much welcomed.

That was such a well written and so sensual story dear eselen. You have a real gift for writing and hope you will find time to provide us with a sequel. Laurence

i wrote this story a little over 2 years go an have been asked many times if i plan to write a sequel. i have thought about it. i want to. i love the relationship between Lily an Clay. the mood to write another story just hasn't hit me again. yet! i'm sure it will though. and when it does, i will be posting here! thank you all again!

Très bonne histoire... mais inachevée : On s'attend à chaque ligne soit que Lily demande à être fessée soit à recevoir la ceinture, ou encore que Clay utilise sa main et sa ceinture pour rosir les fesses de Lily qui n'attendaient que cela; il y a juste une allusion disant que Lily doit être punie parce qu'elle a baissé ses mains, mains sans plus