All Comments on 'Lindsay Gets a Special Gift'

Keep on writing this story and please continue this story pllease

I can't even begin to convey how many of my hidden flights of fancy you were able to hit on in this one short story! I normally don't read alien stories, but something about this one grabbed me and made me read through the setup. Boy am I glad I did; this was an exciting read and I will be on the lookout for Donza's return to Earth, as well as further adventures of our new and cocky Lindsay!

Awesome! Make a sequel out of this

Encore; encore; this deserves a sequel and almost demands it

Cake

thi is one of the best stories I have read in a long time.

if the aliens were scientific they would say cock and pussy waaayyyyy less

most of the typical spelling and grammatical way TOO much. You need to learn when TO use 'to' or 'too' and when to use 'your' or 'you're'.

There are a couple of easy rules.

'To' only points; but 'too', (with more o's), is more.

'You're' is for anything you are doing; your is what belongs to you.

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A couple of housekeeping items:

-- 'Elixir' is the correct spelling.

-- Every time I read 'massaging my tongue', I couldn't help but picture fingers pushing around a tongue.

-- It's important to remember that you are painting mental images with your words. You describe Donza initially, as having 'tenacles' instead of hair, then proceeded to have Lindsay run her hands through Donza's 'hair'. You caught yourself later in the chapter and wrote 'tenacle-like hair', which should have prompted you to do a simple search on the word 'hair' so you could check yourself through out the entire document. (writing IS work, after all, the harder you work at ANYTHING, the better the end result.

You have a good story line, with some help editing, you could have something great.

Good luck and thanks.

http://www.drtuber.com/video/2436539/hot-3d-babe-works-shemales-hard-cock-with-hands-and-pussy

you are welcome!! ;)

Great story, I overlooked the errors in grammar and spelling. I totally love the story and hope that you will continue with it. It has so many possibilities. I’m going to give you and the story 15 stars….. 🤤

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