All Comments on 'Lisa and Me Ch. 02'

another example of why most men should not try lesbian stories. please, just stop. Let women do it from their perspective as most men just are clueless and use words that women just would not, making the story far less than believable and not erotic.

ugh, a waste of 2 minutes

Sorry "UGH" I liked it. Not Purlitzer material but I'm ready for the next chapter..TJ

loved it

You have the core of a good story here, but it is desperately in need of a grammar check and proofreading. So if you're going to continue the series, I'd recommend you have a Lit editor review future installments before you post them. Some examples from just the first few paragraphs:

"...during our next meeting, her and I had gotten naked..."

"...eating my pussy, I as thinking about how..."

"...shoot her over an email to touch base with here,..."

i have read both and each one was the same no real sex. heavy petting but no sex.i was hopeing the two women would eat each other then seduce the babysitter. but the writter didn't do that. he must never have seen two women do each other.

my pussy is soaked. moreee!!!

please keep writing about it as I love to read moor

so good, very well written, and well executed. fun erotic and believable.

IT'S NOT BELIEVABLE AT ALL!It can be seen from a mile that IT'S JUST A FANTASY!

FFS! Please get and use an editor! The grammar is atrocious, and the prose is stilted and jarring. The plot is okay, but it's being grossly waylaid by the terrible writing! **