All Comments on 'Lisa's Birthday'

interesting story needs another chapter. Sounds like the ladies are going to be blackmailed. Love to see where you take this story.

If ever a btb was to take place this is it. To be best they need to be left with a bastard child on her own.

You have potential as a writer. Keep working on it. And ignore the craven cowards that criticize without ever having written themselves. They hide behind the handle "anonymous" or other mask of a screen name that lets them throw rocks at authors like yourself without ever risking anything of their own. Piss on 'em.

Really? ... Seriously? ... that's how it ends? WoW!!

How does a writer who crafts this well-penned story break it off in the reader's mind with such an abrupt and ridiculous conclusion? If this recital is left to stand alone, 75% of the husband (Steve & Mark) storyline could have been easily omitted. The author tells us in the last paragraph that neither husband mattered, even after all the detail put into Mark and Steve. I don't get it!

So Rich5Spot ... open a sequel and finish this tale the way it should be concluded. Make yourself proud!

That's all.