All Comments on 'Little Miss Vanilla Virgin'

Some erotic elements to the story but very poor (or NONexistant) editing. PLEASE ask someone here to assist you. The storyline is OK but is really needs a few touch ups here & there.

One of my pet peeves on this site. It is Literotica, NOT Lit 101. OK, so an editor would help. Even Steven King uses at least one! How and what did you like about the erotica that was a part of this story?

I really liked the way in which she broke out of her shell and risked being bold and assertive and was rewarded for it. That got an A (5*s) and yes some editing would probably help, but the storyline was excellent!