All Comments on 'Little Red Ch. 01'

I think Markus knows the signs of a battered woman… When she gets home I hope that crazy bastard has choked on some damn milk! … LOL

Seriously she need to get her mind right! If he gota put you down in all aspects of your relationship, he ain't the one and don't no love feels or looks like that.

do not hold back this story, it's captivating and i understand Patricias pain

Very good start with a lot of possibilities. Looking forward to more.

Short start but good, keep it up and don't stop now =)

....wait is this were woof story? oh well.

but you need an editor or even just a second reader. There were some spelling and grammatical errors. For instance, stair should've been stare; clu should've been Clue.

The story itself is pretty good. I definitely want to find out more about her mysterious new boss. I liked Manny; he's pretty funny.

I'm liking this story so far and would love to read more. BUT... don't leave us hanging like a lot of writers on here.

Very interesting and compelling start. I'm thinking a good editor could polish this into something truly exceptional. The raw talent is obvious.

Five.

Can't wait to find out how long it will take her to leave Drew once she starts working at the new job.

waiting for the background for these 2 to come forward.

Now to get on with the More Interesting things. Like Drew getting his Ass Whooped. and being from Minnesota . I know A- holes grow everywhere but it would do him well to be Fished out of a Lake. Like the Land of 10,000 .

Hope the next chapter is as good.

This holds tremendous promise looking forward to following along.

Has potential, but man, you NEED an editor!

The constant mistakes are making it hard to read

I really like this story, but the constant grammatical errors make it extremely hard to enjoy.

I could edit your work, if you wanted (I'm an editor on Literotica)

atrocious mistakes that make it hard to read :-(

Its full of spelling and grammar mistakes. I stopped reading .

I like the introduction even though there are grammatical errors you have a beautiful way of drawing the reader in. Your descriptive writing paints a picture. I'm really looking forward to reading more of this story. I would suggest finding an editor to help with some of your writing. No disrespect, you have a great eye for detail and I appreciate that coming from one writer to another.

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Maybe I'm not good at English grammatical stuff but I can read it was a lovely chapter. I saw beyond what so called "errors" they were talking about and seen nothing but a excellent story I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter. Thank you for an intriguing story!!

Oh OK. It's coming along nicely. Highly interested to see where it's going.