by ZenZerker
Please, please get an editor. Your stories are great, but they are unreadable due to extensive over descriptions. Use strong verbs. Cut 90% of your adverbs and adjectives.
I don't think your flowery writing and repeating of the same ten descriptors for a penis or ass should've carried you this far.
A possibly good story buried in a nonstop sex scene.
What’s with the continuous description of Tyler’s tool.
This series is in dire need of an editor.