All Comments on 'Living with Lauren Ch. 02'

Learn to spell and re-read your story before posting. Do you know what perpendicular means? If you did, you'd know that would make for one fucked up move past Judy. Parallel is what you should have said Leaving words out as well stunts the ability to read it. And what about something in the line of sex, at least write a decent cliff-hanger to bring readers back. Take my comments and try to write slower and more thoughtfully about your characters and the events and seduce everyone into their lives. Lance

Was way too short, but considering what I've seen elsewhere on this site, it was pretty good. Looking forward to (a longer) part 3.

I am enjoying reading this story. It is great so far, a little on the short side but not enough to take away from the story & affect the scoring. Please keep on writing more parts to it.

I agree this story is great & requires at least another chapter or two or three. Keep on writing this story please.

you must take us a little further, this is cruelty, to leave us hanging.

This story would have been five stars had you completed it. 😭