All Comments on 'Love (Interrupted) in an Elevator'

I meant to put this at the top of the story, and thought I had, but it seems I did not. This is my first story for Literotica so any and all feedback, public or private is greatly appreciated. Don't be shy, I have a thick skin! M-D

is difficult to write and to read. The entire story happens now and feels awkward. Keep writing and try to deepen the plots.

....much better than most. The key is to lengthen verbiage between uses of course.

First : Thanks for writing!

This style of writing (FP POV) is hard to read. It makes it seem awkward and un-real.

Your story was short with a certain event taking place.

I am with HDK on this. Write a story with plot that would have included or built up to this event. With character development and dialogue. You won't be sorry.