All Comments on 'Love My Castle'

ive read all 3 of your stories they are very good.i hope you keep writing.

this was sweet :) more where that is coming from W, awesome job

There was probably some fun to be had here but the grammar is clunky and the punctuation leaves a lot to be desired. You have fragments that should be joined with commas, yet are separated by periods. Nearly all sentences are simple, declarative ones; you need compound, complex ones to mix things up give some variety. Some dialogue is confusing as you didn't break the different speakers out onto different lines/graphs.

What a wonderful story. I thought it was beautiful. I've always had a weakness for vampires.

Definite improvement with each story, I am loving the plots you have stored in that head of yours!

Like the change of pace from were romance and the difference elements you brought in were wonderful. Agree to some extent with PennLady, but I come from the whole practice makes perfect style so keep writing, keep building and I'll keep reading.

Your writing style and punctuation need help - get an editor.

(makes up some silly excuse as to why she hasn't read any of your work before now.) That was great, I have always wanted to read a good student/teacher story featuring a vampire. :D