by FHH69
This one was a pretty poor effort. It seemed you were bored by the whole story and just wanted to end it. That with the sudden ending did not even arouse my interest. You have talent. The first story in this series got a 5* from me, unfortunately this received a 1*.
I've seen stories end abruptly before, but few so suddenly as this. What happened? Did you just get tired of the story or did you not have any more ideas of what to do with the characters? At any rate, the story was relatively okay, but I'd strongly recommend that you keep your tenses consistent in future pieces- this one jumped from past to present tense and back jarringly a few times. And I feel like you cheated the audience a bit with the quick ending- might wanna consider that in the future, too.