All Comments on 'Lucky Stepdad'

I too have always had fantasies about my step daughter and her friend.My step is 19,and sounds like yours.......damn.loved the story....would like to hear more

Do you plan on any more chapters.

This is a good fantasy that is poorly written. It ends up sounding juvenile and as if it was typed one-handed.

A good idea, poorly executed. Have you never heard of putting speech in quotation marks? It is just confusing otherwise.

Oh, and FYI sexual relations between people who are not blood related is not incest.

Don't give up, it's the ideas that is the most important part of writing. The technical stuff can be learnt.

Please be patient with your writing.Better details, and some anticpatiion with feelings are what is needed. This story sounds so juvenile. Iam sure the next story will be better.

Thanks for sharing.

Sexmate

Have to agree with others. A good story poorly written,mostly because of grammar errors. Nice try,tho...

ok, but next time undress them slowly, describe their panties, and what they are wearing, and with 2 hot teens, i would make sure i fuck them both, before cumming on their firm young titties. rumpman.

I agree with most of the other comments. The idea of this story is lovely, but your description, and grammar were both pretty poor. It really was a good try, but perhaps you didn't try hard enough.