by tor777
I think the last line of the story says it all.
The thing most missing, is a story, or an experience. Other then tentacle monster oh my cloths! Holding me I can’t believe it! Fucking me in the ass! (While stroking my cock and nipples)! How could you? No no yes ahhh.
There is too little a story or character between we the readers, and what is too quickly and unartfully your masturbatory fantasy. The fantasy is fine! The idea sexy. Take your time with it, get a bit of distance. Otherwise we wonder just how many orgasms you had, writing it.
I’m next damn it. Love these types of stories where it does no good to beg, promise or plead. The tentacles don’t care. They only want your cum.
Great story. Would be a lot better being an infant that was taken out of it's carrier. Just saying
I'd love that thing to fuck my ass and suck my cock. Geez you did a great job!
We don't get enough hentai stories like this where the male is milked dry rather than the cliche tentacle on female crap we see. I'd love a continuation of this personally or just more stories like this that get me hard
This was pretty good, but the punctuation and word choice was off/awkward in a couple places. 4/5!
This story had me harder than I have been in a long time! I'd love an experience like that! 5 stars all the way!
All I want now is to be raped by this thing. To be held down and sucked on. Nice job!
I praise the author! It was so electrifying...So real! I'm practically drooling all over myself. Good job!
This was totally hot, I came just thinking about these tentacles fucking me!
I totally love this, it's really hot and detailed. I'd love to hear more stories about the tentacle rape on guys more on, add hot male demons too it as well. Make it pop! If you guys wanna kik me my kik is Killerfrostwing2 if you guys wish to role play it.
Typing when you are probably naked, stroking, moaning and thinking is a difficult combo. But text aside, would love to be tentacled too either by myself or with him, even better in a sucking quicksand.
This is really good, and I want someone to animate it and link it. It would be the best thing ever.
matches the discription perfectly don't know about the slime but it worked if u keep writing this could be a story and i personaly want to read it
This story was perfect, i would love to have this happen to me. Your grammar was a bit weird, but the sexy topic more than made up for it.
FUCKING HOT! I'd love to be "tentacled" by a creature...
new fav word: 'dangersome'
seriously its awsome. the story and the word. hard to describe more, lol sry if this isnt helpful...
Needs some grammar clean up but excellent, and very stimulating story.
This story had me hard as a rock! Don't know what it tapped into, but great job in writing something so unusual and so erotic. Yes, could use a better editing job, true, but the raw imagery was wonderful.
The previous commenter was right as far as grammar goes but over all I found it very entertaining and interesting, this being the first story I've read about tentacles but now I can definetely see why so many of my friends fantasize or have a "thing" for them. Thank you very much for sharing your stroy and I found the detail in this amazing and think you have an absolutely brilliant and creative mind.
If you don't already, get someone to help you out with editing, lots of grammer mistakes and oddly written sentences. Even the best writers will miss mistakes while self editing since your mind knows what it wants to say. That said, nice story, I'd definitly read more if you keep writing.