All Comments on 'Manuscript'

Very well written with great build-up. Thanks!!

somewhat good beginning-but having a jock stud son/ brother added to this family mix-with total family bi..would have made it much better..

I like it. It is simple and sweet.

Well done.

We liked it very much and we're glad you did not screw it up by adding "jock stud son/ brother with total family bi". There is a separate section (Gay Male) for those stories.

What a nice story! I would not change a thing!

This, like all of this authors work, shows a very sensitive understanding of her subject matter and has the added attraction of being very, very erotic. Well done!!!

...needed a longer, more gradual build up before the final stroking began...Intence sexual tension makes these kind of stories really soar. Still. very sweet, and very hot...Nice...

with the reader who wrote "a muscled jock son/brother should be added." Not necessarily for bi-action but because family fun isn't complete until the son of the family gets his big hard cock up between his own mother's legs. Also, dad and his boy can joke and banter as the boy's fucking his mother--the son says, "Mom's got one tight twat, dad," and dad'll say, "it's the twat you came out of, boy, so fuck it real good." The males of the family can also have fun and talk dirty about fucking sis. The son'll say, "hey, dad, your balls helped make that sweet little slit, so have at it," and his father'll reply, "I've wanted to sink my daddy-dick up her cute little coochie, so here goes." Next the boy fucks his little sis and blows his brotherly balls up her sweet little twat. Great family togetherness in the modern liberated family.

HOT