All Comments on 'Marblesilver University'

Storyline moved a little fast, but overall a good story!

was rather fast paced. It's a bit more character development. What I thought odd was that Annabeth and her family practically no longer existed. When dealing with the death of a loved one, you can't really brush over it so quickly whether in real life or in fiction. It appears callous. Also, it looks kind of bad to have the female lead sleep with the male lead so quickly after he just had sex with another woman. Otherwise, your story wasn't bad.

Her name is Aislin and she has special gifts. Is she the only in her family that can do special things? Did her parents report her missing? I am intrigued so please continue.

he then look my book?for someone that loved her then why would he be fucking someone else?

Rushed OUTLINE for a story, too any holes for this to be complete and also WARN us when there is scifi/nonhuman elements. I get this site is fiction but not all of us like reading that.

She handled her parents reaction to her baby sister's death worse than someone half her age. Aside from that, and immediately giving her flower to someone who HAD to have a clue as to how she felt right after he hopped out of someone else's cooch; this story still has great potential. I hope you continue ; -D