All Comments on 'Me and My Cousin(s) Ch. 01'

Junk.

good story basis, but you need to have someone look at it for continuity. I hope you do better on Chapter Two.

...a work of fiction and fantasy, names were made up, etc., just tell the story. We're not going to send a fact checker out to test your veracity. That's why we're here. We believe you.

In our minds we believe you, that is. The rest, we just don't care. Tell it like it really happened.

Keep trying; you're on the proper track.

Marvin

I like your story. Keep going please.

Klukz

poorly written, it sounds like it was poorly translated for some mideast language. there is very little background and almost no character development. the plot was almost nonexistent and who calls their kid BLANKS. this needs a total rewrite by a GOOD WRITER USING A GOOD EDITOR.