All Comments on 'Mean Girls Ch. 01'

You can quicken your slow start and better illustrate your characters by dramatizing their meanness in one or two scenes. Instead of using exposition - describing each girl separately and giving two short paragraphs of them being mean - start the story with a scene of them being nasty and describe each of the girls during the action. Good stuff.

Three gorgeous girls. Two at least with great tits...

One now hooked on BJs, one of titplay & one open to anything!

What's not to love? :-)

Perhaps they'll even learn something from their punishment?

Thanks!

I am so glad I found this fun story, thank you for posting it. It was funny and so hot, wow! Looking forward to all your writing. I think you could go pro.