All Comments on 'Mermaid's Kiss Pt. 01'

Great, well written start - great premise with just the right amount of contextual detail. Can't wait to read more!

Look forward to Chapter 2

I must say I am confused with Alison's reactions. At first she was all pissed off to be going away and I expected her to be sullen when she arrived at Phil's. No, she is all bubbly. I stopped reading then. Did not vote either

the reader stopped reading just because Alison's mood had changed (purposely, or inadvertantly doesn't matter). Bet they finish the first chapter when they see the next installment appear. Enjoyed the first chapter and am looking forward to reading the next one. Please don't keep us waiting.

Seems well written and engaging, shows promise, but it also seems to lack a finish! So we await further chapters!

Love to read more

This is my first attempt, let alone submission, at writing erotica. Thank you for your kind comments. Yes, I realise I should have added something to explain Alison's change of attitude...for that omission, I am sorry, and feel duly chastised.

Part 2 is close to completion.