All Comments on 'Michelle's Husband Has Been Fired Ch. 02'

hello

this was a pretty good story. reading both parts really helped. nice twist at the end, with the husband...I hope the story doesn't end there...(wink)

good job

thx

Well written with great creativity...but be careful with your personal and possessive pronouns (ie. he/she/him/her...), misuse is the quickest way to lose the reader before they're really into the plot.

Hope it helps...took me forever to learn how proofread for clarity, might help to find a nuetral proofreader (to read with clean eyes).

Keep writing, I look forward to the next installment.

Who in the hell is JOHN????

Oh you need this to continue a little longer!! Thanks.